建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give one or two specific details. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use correct verb forms, plural/singular agreement, and simpler linking words (for example, “and,” “because,” “which”).

範例: Yes. There are many tall buildings and some skyscrapers near my home. For example, a cluster of apartment towers and a modern office building are visible from my balcony, which gives the area a lively, modern feel.

建議: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and aim for one clear reason with a concrete example. Use past or present perfect appropriately (e.g., “I often take photos when I visit other cities”).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I visit other cities. For instance, last month I photographed a historic cathedral so I could remember its unique façade and share the images with friends.

建議: Make sure your answer matches the question (they asked about a building to visit, not a store habit). Give a clear example and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Use complete sentences and explain why you want to visit that building, with a specific reason.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit a famous food market in the city center because I enjoy trying local snacks. For example, I want to taste regional chocolates and buy some to bring home.

建議: Answer directly, then give specific, realistic reasons (views, convenience, facilities). Avoid incorrect word choices (e.g., “paranormal” is wrong here) and reduce hesitations. Use clear vocabulary such as “panoramic view” or “good facilities.”

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers a panoramic view of the city and usually has good amenities like a gym and security. For example, a high-rise apartment near the river would let me enjoy sunsets from my balcony.

× Yeah, definitely near my home I can easy to see a lot of high rise building and skyscrapers for and which is so live which he leave me a good impression and is it a great way?

✓ Yeah, definitely. Near my home I can easily see a lot of high-rise buildings and skyscrapers, which leave a good impression on me. Isn't that great?

Multiple issues: adverb placement ('easy' should be adverb 'easily' and should follow subject/verb), plural form ('building' -> 'buildings'), hyphenated compound adjective ('high-rise'), relative clause and pronoun errors ('which he leave me' -> 'which leave a good impression on me'), and awkward tag/question ('is it a great way?' -> 'Isn't that great?'). Suggestion: place adverbs near verbs, use correct plural forms, use hyphens for compound adjectives, and form clear relative clauses and tag questions.

× Oh yes, definitely. Uh, now she's much more often because I only capture the photo of a building when I go, uh, another city. MMM. And I think it a great way to, I can look back and, uh, remember this place and this architecture.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I take photos much more often now because I only used to capture photos of buildings when I visited another city. And I think it's a great way to look back and remember a place and its architecture.

Errors: tense and verb forms ('now she's much more often' unclear; use 'I take photos much more often now'), gerund/infinitive misuse ('capture the photo' -> 'capture photos' or 'take photos'), past habitual ('used to capture' for past habit), preposition and pronoun ('when I go another city' -> 'when I visited another city'), contraction and pronoun agreement ('I think it a great way' -> "I think it's a great way"), possessive for architecture ('this place and this architecture' -> 'a place and its architecture'). Suggestion: use correct tense for habits, use gerunds/infinitives properly, and keep pronouns consistent.

× Oh, I think I like a supermarket because I can, uh, buy something I want. Either a snack or a bar of chocolates. For example. I'm a chocolate lover and I always want to buy a chocolate after, umm, going back home after 1/2.

✓ Oh, I think I would like a supermarket because I can buy what I want, either a snack or a bar of chocolate. For example, I'm a chocolate lover and I always want to buy chocolate after going back home in the evening.

Errors: article and count noun usage ('a supermarket' is OK but 'a bar of chocolates' should be 'a bar of chocolate' and 'a chocolate' unnecessary), sentence fragments ('Either a snack...' should be connected), unclear time expression ('after 1/2' unclear; replaced with 'in the evening'). Suggestion: use 'a bar of chocolate' for a single bar, use uncountable 'chocolate' when speaking generally, and avoid sentence fragments by connecting clauses.

× Oh yes, definitely. I think it is a great idea, especially umm, in nowadays because I can easy to uh, immerse myself in paranormal view from the top of the building.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I think it is a great idea, especially nowadays, because I can easily immerse myself in panoramic views from the top of the building.

Errors: adverb form ('easy' -> 'easily'), incorrect phrase ('in nowadays' -> 'nowadays'), word choice ('paranormal' is incorrect; use 'panoramic'), noun number ('view' -> 'views'), and infinitive form ('immerse myself in' is correct with 'easily'). Suggestion: use 'nowadays' without 'in', convert adjectives to adverbs when modifying verbs, choose correct vocabulary ('panoramic' for wide views), and ensure noun number matches context.