建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), use plural/singular correctly, and give one specific detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, mainly residential towers. In addition, there are some medium-sized commercial buildings nearby, and together they give the area a modern and attractive appearance.

建議: Be natural and avoid repetition. Use a topic sentence, then give a specific example and a linking word to explain when and why you take photos. Correct small grammar errors (it/they, buildings plural).

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when they look colorful or architecturally interesting. For example, I usually take pictures during outings with friends because the lighting and atmosphere make the photos more lively.

建議: Correct grammar and remove hesitations. Begin with a clear sentence (I would like to visit...), correct tense and word choice, and provide a specific reason with a linking word. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'I think of'.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the CN Tower. Since I arrived in Canada I haven't had the chance to go, and I want to because it is very tall; from the top you can see the entire Greater Toronto Area, which would be an amazing view.

建議: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically accurate. Use one or two clear reasons linked logically (for example, better view and more sunlight), fix vocabulary (‘luring’ → ‘living’ or remove), and avoid fillers.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall apartment building because it offers better views and more natural light. For instance, in summer the balcony would be pleasant and the morning sunlight would make the apartment feel bright and welcoming.

× Yes, there are tall buildings near my home, uh, mostly it's residential building and uh, apart from that there is commercial buildings, which is uh, umm, medium sized.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home. Mostly they are residential buildings, and apart from those there are commercial buildings which are medium-sized.

Errors: incorrect and missing articles and mismatched singular/plural. 'it's residential building' uses singular with 'it's' and lacks article; change to plural 'they are residential buildings' to agree with 'tall buildings'. 'there is commercial buildings' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'buildings' (subject-verb agreement/article error); use 'there are commercial buildings'. 'medium sized' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective before a noun: 'medium-sized'. Suggestion: match singular/plural, use correct articles ('a'/'the' only when needed) and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× So these are looks very beautiful and uh, also the residential building looks even more beautiful.

✓ So these look very beautiful, and the residential buildings look even more beautiful.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and singular/plural mismatch. 'these are looks' incorrectly combines auxiliary 'are' with main verb 'looks'; remove 'are' and use plural verb 'look' to agree with 'these'. 'the residential building looks' should be plural 'residential buildings look' to match earlier mention of multiple buildings. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and avoid redundant auxiliaries.

× Yes, I usually take photos of buildings, especially when it seems very beautiful and colorful.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of buildings, especially when they seem very beautiful and colorful.

Error: incorrect pronoun reference and number. 'it seems' refers to a singular noun but 'buildings' is plural; replace with plural pronoun 'they seem'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× And I take the photos of building especially when I'm going outside with my friends for a picnic or an outing.

✓ And I take photos of buildings especially when I'm going out with my friends for a picnic or an outing.

Errors: article misuse and noun number. 'the photos of building' is incorrect; use 'photos of buildings' or 'photos of a building' depending on meaning. Also 'going outside' is better as 'going out' in this context. Suggestion: use plural nouns to match general statements and omit unnecessary definite articles.

× Yes, since I arrived in Canada, I haven't received visited CN Tower so far.

✓ Yes, since I arrived in Canada, I haven't visited the CN Tower so far.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase and article. 'haven't received visited' is ungrammatical — use present perfect 'haven't visited' to express experience up to now. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'CN Tower'. Suggestion: use 'have/has + past participle' for experiences and include necessary articles for proper nouns like landmarks.

× I whenever I get a chance, uh, I think of visiting uh, this building because it's very tall and when you are standing in the top of this building, you can see the entire GTA.

✓ Whenever I get a chance, I think of visiting this building because it's very tall, and when you are standing at the top of it you can see the entire GTA.

Errors: word order and preposition choice. 'I whenever I get a chance' has incorrect word order; move 'whenever I get a chance' to the front. 'in the top' is wrong preposition; use 'at the top'. 'standing in the top of this building' should be 'standing at the top of it' or 'at the top of the building'. Suggestion: place adverbial clauses correctly and use appropriate prepositions ('at the top').

× Yes, I like to live in a tall building, especially in a taller apartments because you will get a greater view, especially luring in the summer and and also you'll get a good, uh, sunlight in the morning when you wake up.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building, especially in a taller apartment because you will get a better view, especially during the summer, and you'll also get good sunlight in the morning when you wake up.

Errors: modal/tense and article/number and word choice. 'I like to live' is acceptable but in this hypothetical context 'I would like to live' is more natural. 'in a taller apartments' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'apartments' — use 'a taller apartment' or 'taller apartments'. 'greater view' is awkward; 'better view' is more natural. 'luring' is incorrect word choice; use 'during' for time. 'a good, uh, sunlight' misuses article with uncountable 'sunlight' — use 'good sunlight' without 'a'. Also duplicate 'and and'. Suggestion: ensure number agreement, choose appropriate modal verbs for preference, use correct prepositions ('during'), and avoid unnecessary articles with uncountable nouns.

× So it's a different experience living in a taller building.

✓ So it's a different experience to live in a taller building.

Error: gerund vs infinitive nuance. 'living in a taller building' is grammatical, but after 'experience' the infinitive 'to live' is stylistically preferable when referring to the act of living as an experience; both forms are possible. Suggested correction improves naturalness and clarity. Suggestion: choose infinitive or gerund consistently; 'a different experience to live...' reads more naturally here.