建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct verb forms and prepositions. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, say whether there are tall buildings, then add a brief reason or personal feeling. Also correct vocabulary mistakes ("scrapers" → "skyscrapers") and remove filler words.

範例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, including a few skyscrapers. For instance, I often visit the observation deck because I enjoy heights and can see the whole city from there.

建議: Be concise and use clearer, more precise language. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and one example. Avoid repetition and fix tense/grammar errors ("That's why I took I" is incorrect). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

範例: Yes, I often photograph old buildings because I appreciate traditional architecture. For example, I like capturing the carved stonework around doors and windows to preserve the intricate details.

建議: Fix tense consistency and remove repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence naming the building, then add one or two specific details about why you want to visit, using linking words such as "because" or "so." Ensure correct prepositions ("near my house") and avoid repeated words.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the Popa building near my house because it used to be the tallest in the city. From its top floors, you can see the entire city spread out, which makes it a great place for sightseeing.

建議: Clarify meaning ("toilet building" is incorrect) and organize ideas: give a direct answer, then two concise reasons with linking words. Remove fillers ("uh") and correct articles and plurals. Use vocabulary accurately ("lift" → "elevator" if speaking for international clarity).

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great city views and convenient elevators. For example, living high up would allow me to enjoy the skyline every day, and I appreciate using elevators when I visit malls or shopping centers.

× Is there are many tall buildings near to my home, some of them are skyscrapers and I love to visit those scrapers because I love heights and when I look from these buildings we I can see the whole city.

✓ There are many tall buildings near my home; some of them are skyscrapers, and I love to visit those skyscrapers because I love heights, and when I look from these buildings I can see the whole city.

Multiple issues: 'Is there are' mixes a question form with a statement; use 'There are' for a declarative sentence (There be issue). 'Near to my home' uses an unnecessary preposition 'to' (Incorrect use of prepositions). 'Scrapers' is a wrong word choice; correct is 'skyscrapers' (vocabulary). There is an extra 'we' before 'I' and missing commas; remove the extraneous word and add punctuation. Suggestion: start with 'There are many tall buildings near my home' then join clauses with commas or semicolons and ensure correct noun 'skyscrapers' and subject 'I'.

× Yes, I love to take photos of old buildings, not modern buildings because I love old architecture and those engravings were on walls or on like doors. I love them. That's why I took I.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos of old buildings rather than modern ones because I love old architecture, and those engravings are on walls and doors. I love them. That's why I take photos of them.

Problems: tense and form consistency—use present simple 'are' for general truths instead of 'were' (Present tense issue). 'On walls or on like doors' uses incorrect preposition and filler 'like' (Incorrect use of prepositions; unnecessary filler). The sentence 'That's why I took I' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'That's why I take photos of them' or 'That's why I took them' depending on meaning (Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use 'rather than' for contrast, 'modern ones' to avoid repetition, 'are on walls and doors', and 'take photos of them' for clarity.

× Yes, there is a building near to my house called Popa. It was the highest building in the city and whenever I went, whenever I visit there I I can see the whole city spread spread over.

✓ Yes, there is a building near my house called Popa. It was the tallest building in the city, and whenever I went there I could see the whole city spread out below.

Issues: 'near to my house' should be 'near my house' (Incorrect use of prepositions). 'Highest' is acceptable but 'tallest' is more natural for buildings (adjective choice). Tense inconsistency: mixing past and present; keep past 'was' and use past ability 'could' rather than 'can' if describing past visits (Past tense issue). Duplicate words 'whenever I went, whenever I visit there' are repetitive and 'visit' should match tense; simplify to 'whenever I went there'. 'Spread spread over' is redundant and missing preposition; use 'spread out below'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct prepositions and vocabulary.

× Yes, I want to live in a toilet building because, uh, in tall building, we can see the whole city and, uh, we can use lift and I'm, I'm very fond of lift. Uh, in, I always, uh, prefer to use lift whenever I go somewhere like mall or shopping complex.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because in a tall building we can see the whole city, and we can use a lift; I'm very fond of lifts. I always prefer to use the lift whenever I go somewhere like a mall or a shopping complex.

Errors: 'toilet building' is a wrong word choice—likely intended 'tall building' (Incorrect use of adjectives). Article errors: 'in tall building' should be 'in a tall building' and 'use lift' should be 'use a lift' or 'use lifts' (Article errors). Repetition and fillers ('uh') should be removed for clarity. Use plural 'lifts' or 'the lift' depending on context and add articles before 'mall' and 'shopping complex'. Suggestion: remove disfluencies, add appropriate articles, and correct 'toilet' to 'tall'.