建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatically correct, and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Correct errors (e.g., use plural/singular and prepositions), avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases, and add one specific supporting detail. Use one linking word if needed.

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. My hometown is a coastal village, so most houses are low-rise and I grew up surrounded by small cottages and fishing boats.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatical topic sentence and coherent supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant words. Use linking words (for example, also) and give specific examples of buildings and what you focus on when photographing them.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I enjoy capturing architectural details. For example, when I travel I photograph historic churches and modern museums, focusing on facades and decorative elements to show different styles.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct name/pronunciation, and combine short fragments into complete sentences. Add one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit the National Museum of Tokyo because it is reopening after renovation. I’m especially interested in its modern architecture and the new exhibition on contemporary Japanese art.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with two specific reasons linked coherently. Fix grammar and remove repetition. Use linking words such as because or moreover to explain your reasons.

範例: No, I would not want to live in a tall building because it feels a bit frightening and elevators can be inconvenient. For example, I prefer quick access to street level and I worry about slow elevators during busy hours.

× There's no tall buildings near my home.

✓ There are no tall buildings near my home.

Subject 'buildings' is plural, so the verb should be plural 'are' not singular 'is'. Use 'There are' with plural nouns. Suggestion: match 'there + be' verb to noun number (There are + plural).

× My hometown is in the room area near the sea so I was grown up surrounded by.

✓ My hometown is in a rural area near the sea, so I grew up surrounded by nature.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice ('room' -> 'rural'), wrong verb form ('was grown up' is passive and incorrect), and an incomplete phrase 'surrounded by'. Use active past tense 'I grew up' and complete the phrase 'surrounded by nature'. Suggestion: use proper adjective 'rural' and active past 'grew up'.

× Yes, I often take photos of different things because I enjoy capturing architectural details and the rain right interact with forces.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of different things because I enjoy capturing architectural details and how the rain interacts with surfaces.

The clause 'the rain right interact with forces' is ungrammatical. Use third-person singular present 'interacts' for 'rain' and a clear object 'surfaces' or similar. Also include 'how' to introduce the clause. Suggestion: use 'how the rain interacts with surfaces' to express interaction clearly.

× For example, when I travel, I photograph historic church churches or modern schools to document different styles and dress this prom compost.

✓ For example, when I travel, I photograph historic churches or modern schools to document different styles and details.

The original repeats 'church' ('church churches') and contains meaningless phrase 'dress this prom compost'. Replace repeated noun with plural 'churches' and use a logical noun 'details'. Suggestion: remove duplication and replace unclear words with context-appropriate nouns like 'details'.

× I would like to visit Adult Tokyo Museum in Tokyo.

✓ I would like to visit the Adachi Tokyo Museum in Tokyo.

Museum names often require the definite article 'the' before them in this context. Also 'Adult' seems incorrect; likely the intended name is 'Adachi' or another proper name—use the correct proper noun. Suggestion: use 'the' before museum names when referring to a specific place and ensure the correct proper name is used.

× It is now under renovation and it reopens this year.

✓ It is now under renovation and will reopen this year.

The verb 'reopens' with present simple is awkward for a future scheduled event when combined with 'is now under renovation'. Use 'will reopen' or 'is scheduled to reopen' to express future intention. Suggestion: use 'will reopen' for future events or 'is scheduled to reopen' for formal statements.

× I'm very. Looking for.

✓ I'm really looking forward to it.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Combine into a single, complete sentence expressing anticipation: 'looking forward to it'. Suggestion: use the phrase 'looking forward to' plus object to express excitement.

× No, living in a tall building is a little scary and inconvenient for me.

✓ No, living in a tall building is a little scary and inconvenient for me.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It matches present general statement about preferences. No change needed. Suggestion: none.

× I feel it is confusing when in the elevator when.

✓ I find it confusing when I'm in the elevator.

The original has redundant 'when' and awkward word order. Use 'I find it confusing' and include subject and verb 'I'm in the elevator'. Suggestion: avoid dangling 'when' and include subject+verb for the subordinate clause.