建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Correct grammar (e.g., 'There are no tall buildings', 'residential area'), replace vague phrases like 'my cup of tea' with clearer expressions, and link ideas with words such as 'however' or 'for example.'

範例: There are no tall buildings near my home because we live in a residential area full of villas. However, I would like to see a famous skyscraper in the future. For example, the Burj Khalifa in Dubai is one I especially want to visit because of its record height and impressive design.

建議: Make a direct, complete response and avoid trailing off. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'the same kind of architecture') and link sentences (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Be specific about what you photograph and why, and finish your thought in 2–4 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I plan to design my own house one day. I take pictures of façades, window styles, and rooflines so I can use them as references when planning layouts and materials. This helps me remember details and inspires my designs.

建議: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and organize reasons logically. Use correct phrasing ('on my bucket list' or 'on my wish list', 'I have always wanted') and provide 1–2 specific reasons why. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: The building I'd most like to visit is the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I have always wanted to experience its observation deck for the views and to learn about its engineering. I would also like to see architectural highlights of Mumbai, such as famous modern residences.

建議: Give a clear, structured opinion: state yes or no, then give reasons using linking words ('however', 'but', 'because'). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases ('Text my cup of tea'). Be specific about what appeals or worries you and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I would like to try living in a tall building for a short time because it would be thrilling and offer great views. However, I would be uncomfortable living there permanently because of the height and potential safety concerns.

× There is no tall buildings near my home because we live in a residence area and it is all filled with villas.

✓ There are no tall buildings near my home because we live in a residential area and it is filled with villas.

The subject 'buildings' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'residence area' is incorrect collocation; use 'residential area'. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural verbs and use common adjective forms (residential).

× But I want to watch a tall building in future.

✓ But I want to see a tall building in the future.

Use 'see' rather than 'watch' for visiting or viewing buildings. Include the article 'the' before 'future' when referring to a general future time. Suggestion: use 'see' for experiencing places and say 'in the future'.

× Umm, the Burj Khalifa which is located in Dubai is my favorite thing to watch in future.

✓ Umm, the Burj Khalifa, which is located in Dubai, is my favorite place to see in the future.

'Thing to watch' is unnatural; use 'place to see'. 'In future' needs 'in the future'. Also commas are needed around the relative clause. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'place to see' and add commas for nonrestrictive clauses.

× I often take photos of buildings because I want to construct same kind of architecture when I want to build my own building in future.

✓ I often take photos of buildings because I want to construct the same kind of architecture when I build my own building in the future.

Remove the extra 'want to' before 'build' to avoid unnecessary use of 'want to' + base verb (sentence flow). Add article 'the' before 'same kind' and 'in the future'. Suggestion: simplify future subordinate clause to 'when I build my own building in the future'.

× So that taking some pictures of buildings as a reference will be helpful for me.

✓ So, taking some pictures of buildings as a reference will be helpful for me.

Beginning with 'So that' creates an incorrect clause structure; 'So' is appropriate to introduce a result. Suggestion: use 'So,' or 'That is why' to introduce the result, not 'So that' which usually introduces purpose clauses.

× So that's the reason and the way when I look at the building, it gives me a very.

✓ So that's the reason and the way: when I look at a building, it inspires me a lot.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward ('it gives me a very' is unfinished). Replace with a complete clause conveying the intended meaning. Suggestion: finish thoughts fully and choose appropriate verbs (e.g., 'inspires me a lot').

× As I said before, it is Burj Khalifa because it is my dream list.

✓ As I said before, it is the Burj Khalifa because it is on my list of dreams.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'Burj Khalifa'. 'Dream list' is awkward; use 'list of dreams' or 'bucket list'. Suggestion: include articles with proper nouns when standard and use natural noun phrases.

× I always wanted to visit Dubai and see the culture I and in the same way I wanted to visit this particular place, Burj Khalifa.

✓ I have always wanted to visit Dubai and experience the culture, and in the same way I wanted to visit this particular place, the Burj Khalifa.

Verb tense: use present perfect 'have always wanted' for life experiences up to now. 'See the culture I' is ungrammatical; use 'experience the culture'. Add 'the' before 'Burj Khalifa'. Suggestion: use 'experience' for culture and correct word order.

× It is the tallest building in the entire world and the other building is Ambani's house in Mumbai.

✓ It is the tallest building in the world, and another building I like is Ambani's house in Mumbai.

'The entire world' is wordy; 'in the world' is natural. 'The other building' implies a specific previously mentioned single other; use 'another building' for an additional example. Suggestion: choose appropriate determiners ('another' vs 'the other').

× Text my cup of tea actually, and I feel it's very terrible because of the height, uh, but it gives me thrill so that I just, I want to live in a tall building, at least for a while.

✓ It's not my cup of tea, actually, and I feel nervous because of the height, but it gives me a thrill, so I would like to live in a tall building, at least for a while.

'Text my cup of tea' is incorrect; should be 'not my cup of tea'. 'Very terrible' is unnatural; use 'nervous' or 'terrified'. 'Gives me thrill' needs an article: 'gives me a thrill'. 'So that I just, I want' is awkward; use 'so I would like'. Suggestion: use correct idioms ('not my cup of tea'), appropriate adjectives for feelings, and proper modal forms ('would like').