建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 직접 질문에 답했지만 문법적 오류와 불필요한 반복이 있습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 관사(a/the) 사용, 단수/복수 일치, 그리고 문장 연결을 고쳐야 합니다. 예를 들어 ‘I live in the city’로 고치고, ‘there are lots of tall apartment and office buildings’ 대신 ‘many tall apartment and office buildings’로 바꾸세요. 또한 한두 문장으로 간결하게 말하고 필요하면 한두 개의 구체적 예시(예: 몇 층짜리 건물인지)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes. I live in the city, so there are many tall apartment and office buildings near my home. For example, there is a 20‑storey apartment block and a 15‑storey office tower within a ten‑minute walk.

建議: 의미 전달은 되지만 문법과 어휘 선택에 문제가 많습니다. 관사(a/an/the)와 복수형, 시제(현재/과거) 일치를 바로잡으세요. ‘take photos of buildings’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 쓰고, 이유와 구체적 상황(어디서, 언제, 어떤 건물인지)을 연결어(for example, when, such as)로 설명하면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I travel. For example, last week in Japan I photographed several unusual temples and modern skyscrapers because I liked their unique designs.

建議: 답변 시작에 불필요한 단어(Temperature)가 들어가 있습니다. 방문하고 싶은 건물을 명확히 말하고, 이유를 연결어(because/so/and)로 구체적으로 설명하세요. ‘well known of famous buildings’ 같은 표현 대신 ‘a well‑known building’ 또는 ‘a famous landmark’로 바꾸고 시제·형용사 사용을 정리하세요. 밤에 왜 로맨틱한지 구체적 이유를 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit the Apple Tower, which is a well‑known landmark. I think it would be especially romantic at night because the exterior lights create a beautiful atmosphere and there are nice viewing platforms.

建議: 불완전한 문장(‘because.’ 뒤에 이유 누락)과 철자/어휘 오류(‘scarce living H’, ‘weight elevators’)가 있습니다. 이유를 명확히 말하고 연결어(to, because, and)로 문장을 이어 경쾌하게 설명하세요. 예를 들어 ‘too crowded’, ‘lack of privacy’, ‘waiting for elevators’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 한두 개의 구체적 이유(예: 층간 소음, 대피 문제)를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

範例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building. It often feels too crowded and there can be long waits for the elevator, which is annoying. Also, I prefer a house with a garden because it offers more privacy and outdoor space.

× Yes, there are so many tall buildings near my home because I live in city and there are lots of tall apartment and office buildings also I live in.

✓ Yes, there are so many tall buildings near my home because I live in a city and there are lots of tall apartment and office buildings where I live.

Use a definite/indefinite article with singular countable nouns: 'city' should be 'a city'. Also 'apartment and office buildings' refers to plural nouns so keep plural, and add 'where I live' to complete the clause. Suggestion: always include 'a/an' with singular countable nouns and ensure clauses are complete.

× Yes, I take a photos with buildings especially when I travels I like to take a porters strange buildings. Last week when I travel Japan, I take up photos.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings, especially when I travel; I like to take pictures of strange buildings. Last week when I traveled to Japan, I took some photos.

Multiple issues: 'a photos' is incorrect—'photos' is plural so no 'a' (quantifier error). 'When I travels' should be 'when I travel' (subject-verb agreement/present tense). 'porters' is wrong word; use 'pictures'. 'When I travel Japan' needs preposition 'to' and past tense 'traveled' and 'took' for last week. Suggestions: use correct quantifiers (a/an for singular countable nouns), choose correct nouns, and match tense to time expressions.

× Temperature. Yes, I would like to visit Apple Tower which is well known of famous buildings. I think it was romantic special in night.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Apple Tower, which is a well-known landmark. I think it is especially romantic at night.

'Temperature.' is an unrelated fragment—remove. 'Well known of famous buildings' is ungrammatical; use 'a well-known landmark' or 'one of the famous buildings.' 'I think it was romantic special in night' has wrong tense and word order: use present 'is', adverb 'especially', and preposition 'at night'. Suggestions: remove irrelevant fragments, use correct adjective forms and article 'a', and place adverbs in appropriate positions.

× No, I don't want to live in tall buildings because. It was a really scarce living H and also it's boring to weight elevators.

✓ No, I don't want to live in tall buildings because it is really cramped, and it's boring to wait for elevators.

'Because.' is a sentence fragment; combine with following clause. 'It was a really scarce living H' is meaningless and uses wrong words and article; use 'cramped' or 'a scarce living space' but better 'really cramped' and present tense 'is' to match general preference. 'weight' is wrong verb, should be 'wait'. Suggestions: avoid sentence fragments, use appropriate adjectives, and choose correct verbs. Ensure tense consistency for general statements (present simple).