建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và ngắn gọn (1-2 câu chủ đề), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (số nhiều/ít, giới từ) và bớt tiếng ừ/à. Mô tả cụ thể hơn (khoảng cách, ví dụ) và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc.

範例: No, there aren't any tall buildings right next to my home. However, in my hometown there is an apartment tower of about 25 storeys about two kilometres away.

建議: Cần dùng thì đúng (I usually take), cấu trúc câu tự nhiên và loại bỏ từ ngữ thừa. Nêu rõ tần suất, ví dụ cụ thể và lý do chụp để câu đầy đủ và có nội dung hơn.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos of interesting buildings when I travel. For example, I photographed the modern architecture in Georgia and the Merlion statue area in Singapore because I found their designs fascinating.

建議: Cần một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (I would like to visit...), tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (fascinated, take a picture with fans?). Giải thích cụ thể lý do (kiến trúc, cảnh, cảm xúc) và kết hợp bằng liên từ để trôi chảy.

範例: I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because I find its iron lattice structure and history fascinating. I want to see the views from the top and take some photographs to remember the experience.

建議: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và sửa ngữ pháp (I would/ I do, see the whole city). Tránh nói lặp và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (lợi ích/nhược điểm). Dùng liên từ để hợp lý hóa ý tưởng.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views of the whole city, especially at night. I also think living high up would feel quieter and more private.

× They aren't tall buildings in my home, however in my hometown, uh it is apartment to about 25 floors.

✓ There aren't tall buildings near my home; however, in my hometown there is an apartment building of about 25 floors.

The sentence has incorrect word order and missing existential 'there' (There be issue) and article use. Use 'There aren't' to indicate absence, then contrast with 'in my hometown there is an apartment building of about 25 floors.' Also replace 'in my home' with 'near my home' and 'it is apartment to about 25 floors' with 'there is an apartment building of about 25 floors.' Suggestions: use 'there is/there are' for existence and correct noun phrases and word order. ID:26

× Well, I usually taking photo of a Georgia's building, uh, like, uh, this lion in uh, Singapore, uh, something else, uh, fascinating.

✓ Well, I usually take photos of Georgia's buildings, like the Merlion in Singapore and other fascinating structures.

The verb 'usually' should be followed by the base form 'take' (do-support with adverbs), not the '-ing' form. Also correct plural 'photos' and possessive/Proper noun usage: 'Georgia's building' is unclear; assumed 'Georgia's' might be a mistake, so used 'Georgia's buildings' or proper landmark 'Merlion.' Suggestions: after frequency adverbs use base verb, and use plural nouns when referring generally. ID:8

× This is a building that I would like to visit is uh, Eiffel Tower in Paris. Because it is very gorgeous, I have a fascinate about it. Therefore I want to visit to see them and take a picture with fan.

✓ The building I would like to visit is the Eiffel Tower in Paris. Because it is very gorgeous, I am fascinated by it, so I want to visit, see it, and take a picture with it.

The original has a redundant 'This is a building that ... is' causing a sentence structure error and missing articles. 'Eiffel Tower' requires the definite article 'the.' 'I have a fascinate about it' is incorrect: use the adjective 'fascinated' and the preposition 'by.' 'See them' should be 'see it' and 'take a picture with fan' unclear; use 'take a picture with it.' Suggestions: use concise relative clause 'The building I would like to visit is...' and correct adjective and preposition combinations. ID:26

× I do because, uh, that in the tall buildings, uh, I can see a view that, uh, I just saw all of the city. I can see how Georgia's is do in the night, in the near life is landing.

✓ Yes, because in tall buildings I can see a view of the whole city. I can see what Georgia does at night and how life in the neighborhood looks.

Several tense and tense-mismatch issues: 'I just saw all of the city' mixes past ('saw') with present context; use present simple 'see' or present continuous as appropriate. 'How Georgia's is do in the night' is ungrammatical; use 'what Georgia does at night' or specify 'the city.' 'In the near life is landing' is unclear; interpreted as 'how life in the neighborhood looks.' Suggestions: maintain present tense when describing habitual or general abilities ('I can see'), correct verb forms, and clarify noun phrases. ID:6