建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法の誤りと冗長さ、発音上の名前（Toby）は不要です。まず直接に“Yes/No”で答え、続けて簡潔に場所と具体例を述べ、文を一つか二つにまとめてください。接続語（however, but, nearby）を自然に使い、単数・複数や前置詞（near, at）に注意しましょう。例：短く明確なトピック文→補足（場所・具体例）→一つの結論。

範例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. However, if I go to the next station I can see some tall apartment blocks and a department store.

建議: 内容は明確で自然ですが、頻度表現と文法（主語・動詞の一致）、フィラー（umm, uh）の削減が必要です。まず短い肯定の主文を置き、理由をbecauseで繋ぎ、具体例（どのような建築の特徴か）を挙げてください。語彙を少し正確にし、現在形の一致に注意しましょう。

範例: Yes, I sometimes do. I usually take photos when a building has striking architecture or an attractive setting, because those features make the scene worth photographing. I rarely photograph ordinary buildings.

建議: 良い回答の骨子がありますが、冗長さと時制・語順の誤りがあります。まず一文で行きたい場所を明確に述べ、次に具体例を挙げて理由を付けましょう。繰り返し（I always I always）や不自然な表現（come to America → visit the US）を避け、適切な冠詞と時制に注意してください。

範例: Yes. I would like to visit landmarks in South Korea, such as Namsan Tower, because I’ve seen them in photos and they look impressive. I’d also like to visit famous skyscrapers in the United States that I often see on TV.

建議: 答えは明確ですが文法と語順、冗長なフィラーが多く、理由の表現が不自然です。まず“Honestly, no”のあと短く理由を述べ、感情表現（uncomfortable, afraid of heights）を使って具体的に説明してください。不要な語（that, in the highest place）を削除し、現在形で簡潔に述べましょう。

範例: Honestly, no. I wouldn’t like to live in a tall apartment because I feel uncomfortable with heights and prefer a lower-floor home.

× No, there are not Toby near my home, but if I go the next station from my home I can see some tall apartment building and department store.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my home, but if I go to the next station from my home I can see some tall apartment buildings and a department store.

The student used 'are not Toby' which is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation; replace with 'are no' for negation with plural noun. 'Apartment building' and 'department store' should match plurality and articles: use 'apartment buildings' (plural) and 'a department store' (singular with article). Also add 'to' after 'go' for correct preposition use. Suggestion: use 'there are no' for negating existence of plural items and ensure nouns agree in number and take appropriate articles.

× Yes, sometimes I think, umm, because when the building is, has like a beautiful landscape or beautiful architecture, uh, I usually takes some picture.

✓ Yes, sometimes I do, because when a building has a beautiful facade or beautiful architecture, I usually take some pictures.

Errors: 'I usually takes' shows incorrect verb form — with subject I, use base verb 'take'. 'When the building is, has like' is awkward; use 'when a building has' and 'facade' or 'architecture' instead of 'landscape'. Use plural 'pictures' after 'some'. Also include auxiliary 'do' for simple present emphasis: 'Yes, sometimes I do.' Suggestion: match subject and verb (I take), choose natural noun phrases, and use plural where appropriate.

× But if just, umm, usual buildings, I'm not really taking picture of that.

✓ But with ordinary buildings, I don't really take pictures of them.

Errors: 'I'm not really taking picture of that' mixes progressive aspect incorrectly and lacks plural/object agreement. For habitual actions, use simple present 'don't really take'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' and referents need pronoun 'them' for buildings. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and ensure noun-pronoun agreement.

× Yes, of course. Uh, I would like to see some building in South Korea like Namsan Tower or I would like to come to America and see another tall building that I always I always seen in news or television.

✓ Yes, of course. I would like to see buildings in South Korea like Namsan Tower, or I would like to come to America and see other tall buildings that I have always seen on the news or on television.

Errors: 'some building' should be plural 'buildings' or 'a building'; 'another tall building that I always I always seen' has tense and repetition issues. Use present perfect 'have seen' for experiences up to now and preposition 'on' with 'the news'/'television'. Remove repeated phrase. Suggestion: use 'have seen' for past experiences relevant to present and correct article/number and prepositions.

× Honestly no I don't like live in tall apartment that because it's uh makes me feel not comfortable in the highest place.

✓ Honestly, no. I don't like living in tall apartments because they make me feel uncomfortable at great heights.

Errors: After 'don't like' use gerund 'living' not base verb 'live'. 'Tall apartment' should be plural 'apartments' or 'a tall apartment' with article; better to generalize plural. 'It's uh makes me feel' combines two verbs; use 'they make me feel' to agree with plural subject. 'Not comfortable in the highest place' is unnatural; use 'uncomfortable at great heights'. Suggestion: use gerund after verbs of preference, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural idiomatic expressions for fear of heights.