建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 문장 구조를 바로잡고 응답을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 만들 필요가 있습니다. 단수·복수 형태(“a three-storey building” vs “buildings”)와 관사 사용을 고치고, 불필요한 단문들을 연결하여 1~2문장으로 정리하세요. 또한 ‘100 livings’와 같은 표현 대신 ‘about 100 residents’처럼 명확한 표현을 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, there is a three-storey apartment building near my home. It houses about 100 residents.

建議: 발화의 흐름을 매끄럽게 하고 불필요한 반복과 음성 틱(uh, so when I)들을 줄여야 합니다. 또한 문장을 연결할 때 연결어(if/when/because 등)를 정확히 사용하고, ‘special shape building’ 대신 ‘uniquely shaped building’ 같은 더 자연스러운 표현을 쓰세요.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos of buildings when I notice a unique shape, because pictures help me remember their distinctive features.

建議: 숫자와 수식어의 위치를 바로잡고 반복(“it it”)과 불필요한 발화 중단을 제거하세요. ‘a cafe in an 11-storey building’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 이유를 말할 때는 연결어(so/so that/because)를 정확히 사용해 한두 문장으로 명확히 설명하세요.

範例: Yes, I'd like to visit a café in an 11-storey building because it's high up and quiet, which would help me concentrate on my studies.

建議: 문장 연결을 매끄럽게 하고 반복(“I I”)을 제거하세요. ‘more quiet’ 대신 ‘quieter’를 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명해 보세요. 예를 들어 소음이 적거나 전망 때문에 기분 전환이 된다는 식으로 구체적 결과를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it's usually quieter and offers a nice view, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

× Yes, there is a three Storey buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there is a three-storey building near my home.

The subject refers to a single building, so 'there is' is correct but 'buildings' should be singular. Hyphenate 'three-storey' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: use singular noun with correct adjective form: 'a three-storey building'.

× Specifically it is apartment.

✓ Specifically, it is an apartment.

The noun 'apartment' requires the indefinite article 'an' because it begins with a vowel sound. Also add a comma after 'Specifically' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'an apartment' and include proper punctuation.

× With 100 livings.

✓ It has about 100 residents.

'With 100 livings' is ungrammatical: 'living' isn't the correct noun for people; use 'residents' or 'units'. Also complete the sentence with a subject and verb. Suggestion: 'It has about 100 residents' or 'There are about 100 units.'

× Yes, I usually take photos of building when I so when I see uh, special shape building.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of buildings when I see a building with a special shape.

Use plural 'buildings' to match the general activity, and add article 'a' before 'building with a special shape'. Remove redundant words 'when I so when I' and place modifiers in correct order. Suggestion: 'take photos of buildings when I see a building with a special shape.'

× This is because I can memorize the special building easily by watching photos.

✓ This is because I can remember a distinctive building more easily by looking at photos.

'Memorize' is unnatural here; 'remember' fits better. Use 'a distinctive building' or 'a special building' and 'by looking at photos' is more natural than 'watching photos'. Suggestion: prefer 'remember' and 'look at photos.'

× Yes, I'd like to visit a cafe with UH-11 story building.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit a cafe in an 11-story building.

Use 'in' not 'with' to indicate location, include the article 'an' before vowel sound '11', and hyphenate '11-story' as a compound adjective. Remove 'UH-' filler. Suggestion: 'a cafe in an 11-story building.'

× This is because it it is tall, so I can concentrate my studies with, uh, quiet.

✓ This is because it is tall, so I can concentrate on my studies in a quiet environment.

Remove duplicated 'it it'. Use 'concentrate on my studies' (correct preposition) and 'in a quiet environment' is grammatically and idiomatically correct. Suggestion: 'concentrate on my studies in a quiet environment.'

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change. Keep as is. Note: no applicable error from the provided list.

× This is because it is more quiet and it has a nice view so I I take a breather.

✓ This is because it is quieter and has a nice view, so I can take a breather.

Use comparative 'quieter' rather than 'more quiet'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'can take a breather' to express possibility. Add comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: 'it is quieter and has a nice view, so I can take a breather.'