建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคและไวยากรณ์ให้ชัดเจน ใช้ประโยคเริ่มต้นตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น สถานที่และเหตุผล ใช้ linking words เช่น "because" หรือ "so" อย่างถูกต้อง และคุมความยาวไม่เกิน 3-4 ประโยค

範例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in Bangkok, the capital city. For example, there are several residential towers and office blocks along the main road. Because the city is crowded, developers build upwards to house more people.

建議: แก้คำศัพท์และสำนวนที่ใช้ผิด เช่น "take orders" ต้องเป็น "take photos" หรือ "take pictures" ให้เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงคำถามแล้วอธิบายสั้นๆ ด้วยตัวอย่างหรือความรู้สึก ใช้ linking word เช่น "because" เพื่อเชื่อมเหตุผล และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ

範例: No, I don't usually take pictures of buildings because I prefer to enjoy a place with my own eyes. For instance, when I visit a temple I focus on the atmosphere rather than photographing every detail. This helps me remember the experience more vividly.

建議: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวเรื่องและให้เหตุผลหรือยกตัวอย่างที่ชัดเจน ปรับไวยากรณ์ เช่น "No, there isn't" หรือพูดในเชิงบวกว่า "I prefer..." อธิบายคำว่า "peaceful" ว่าหมายถึงอะไร และเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อม เช่น "because" หรือ "so"

範例: No, there's no particular building I want to visit because I prefer peaceful places like my hometown. For example, I enjoy quiet parks and small temples where I can relax, so tall, busy buildings don't appeal to me.

建議: โครงสร้างตอบดี แต่ควรเพิ่มคำอธิบายรายละเอียดและความสมเหตุสมผล ตัวอย่างเช่นยกเหตุผลหลายข้อ (ความปลอดภัย, ความเป็นส่วนตัว, ค่าใช้จ่าย) และเชื่อมเหตุผลด้วยคำนำเช่น "because" หรือ "also" ปรับวลีให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น "escape quickly"

範例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I worry about safety during emergencies like earthquakes or fires. Also, I prefer ground-level homes for easier access and a stronger sense of community.

× Yes, around my home has lots of tall building because my home is in the capital city.

✓ Yes, around my home there are lots of tall buildings because my home is in the capital city.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'lots of' which indicates more than one. Also, the sentence lacks a proper subject; add 'there are' to form a correct existential construction ('There are lots of tall buildings'). Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun when indicating existence of multiple items.

× You know, Bangkok is the popular in Thailand, so more people live in the tall building.

✓ You know, Bangkok is the most popular city in Thailand, so more people live in tall buildings.

'the popular' is incorrect; superlative form 'the most popular' is needed and 'city' must be included to complete the idea. 'the tall building' is wrong because it generalizes; use plural 'tall buildings' without 'the' to indicate buildings in general. Suggestion: use 'the most' for superlatives and plural nouns when speaking generally.

× I don't like to take orders of buildings because when I go anywhere I like to see the place for my eyes.

✓ I don't like to take photos of buildings because when I go anywhere I like to see the place with my own eyes.

'take orders of buildings' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'take photos of buildings' (noun). 'see the place for my eyes' is ungrammatical; idiomatic expression is 'see with my own eyes'. Also 'own' clarifies personal experience. Suggestion: use correct collocations like 'take photos of' and 'see with my own eyes'.

× It made me feel feel real, like I touched the atmosphere.

✓ It makes me feel real, like I can feel the atmosphere.

Redundant 'feel feel' is a repetition error. Tense should match general preference: use present 'makes' for habitual feelings. 'like I touched the atmosphere' is unnatural; 'like I can feel the atmosphere' or 'as if I can touch the atmosphere' is better. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use appropriate tense and natural collocations ('feel real', 'feel the atmosphere').

× No, is not a building that I want to visit because I like to live in the place that peaceful, such as my hometown.

✓ No, there is not a building that I want to visit because I like to live in places that are peaceful, such as my hometown.

Missing 'there' and verb in existential construction: use 'there is not' to indicate a building. 'the place that peaceful' lacks a verb and article: use 'places that are peaceful' to pluralize and include 'are'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence and include 'be' verb when describing nouns (e.g., 'places that are peaceful').

× It is very good.

✓ It is very nice.

While not strictly ungrammatical, 'very good' is awkward when describing a peaceful place; 'very nice' or 'very pleasant' is more natural. Suggestion: choose adjectives that collocate with 'place' (e.g., 'pleasant', 'peaceful', 'nice').

× I don't want to live in a tall building because it is very unsafe.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building because they are very unsafe.

Using 'it' to refer to 'a tall building' can be acceptable, but when speaking generally about tall buildings, plural 'they are' is more natural. Also 'unsafe' is fine. Suggestion: when generalizing, use plural subject and verb agreement ('they are').

× When we have the dangerous situation such as earthquake or fire, we cannot run escape in time.

✓ In dangerous situations such as earthquakes or fires, we cannot escape in time.

The phrase 'have the dangerous situation' is awkward; use 'in dangerous situations'. 'such as earthquake or fire' needs plural nouns and articles: 'earthquakes or fires'. 'run escape' is incorrect collocation; simply 'escape' or 'run to escape' — 'escape' alone is better. Suggestion: use correct collocations and pluralize general nouns when speaking about types of events.