建筑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "modern apartment blocks and office towers"). Add one specific detail about location or scale and use a linking phrase if needed.

範例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. In the past few years the neighborhood has developed quickly, with new modern apartment blocks and office towers rising along the main road.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar and collocations. Use linking words and be specific about when and why you photograph buildings. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "take a photo about" or "function of."

範例: Sometimes. When I travel to a new city I like to photograph its tallest buildings because they reveal local architectural styles. For example, last year I photographed the city’s tallest tower to capture its unique glass façade.

建議: Use correct tense and clearer descriptions. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Replace informal phrases like "super modern" with precise adjectives.

範例: Yes. I would like to visit Shanghai Tower because I have only seen it from the outside. It is an impressive example of modern architecture, and I would like to go to the observation deck to enjoy panoramic views of the city.

建議: Make the answer more natural and correct collocations. Start with a clear opinion, then explain using specific details and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like "living in a tall beauty" or "have an idea to see."

範例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy panoramic views. During the day I could watch clouds and river traffic, and at night I would enjoy the city lights and skyline views from my windows.

× The area is being developed really fast in recent years so now we got we've got a bunch of tall beauty type buildings for new apartment blocks and office towers.

✓ The area has been developing really fast in recent years, so now we have a bunch of tall, modern-looking buildings for new apartment blocks and office towers.

Mixed tense and incorrect forms: 'is being developed... in recent years' mixes present continuous passive with a time expression implying a continuing change; 'we got we've got' is informal and ungrammatical; 'beauty type' is incorrect adjective use. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect passive for actions that started in the past and continue to the present: 'has been developing' or 'has been developed'. Use 'we have' instead of 'we've got' in formal corrections. 'Modern-looking' correctly describes appearance; add commas between adjectives.

× Yes I do sometimes, especially when I travel to some new city and like to take a photo about their highest building in the country.

✓ Yes, I do sometimes, especially when I travel to a new city and like to take a photo of its tallest building.

Incorrect preposition and pronoun: 'about' should be 'of' when taking a photo; 'their highest building in the country' has wrong pronoun and phrasing—use 'its tallest building' to refer to the city. Also use 'a new city' rather than 'some new city.'

× In the city I found there are a lot of function of different buildings, but most of that they are in function of to work.

✓ In the city I found that there are many buildings with different functions, but most of them are used for work.

Several preposition and noun-choice errors: 'a lot of function of different buildings' should be 'many buildings with different functions'; 'most of that they are in function of to work' is ungrammatical—use 'most of them are used for work' or 'serve as workplaces.' Use 'them' to refer back to 'buildings.'

× I've always wanted to visit Shanghai Tower. I've seen it from the outside a few times, but I've never actually go go up to the top.

✓ I've always wanted to visit Shanghai Tower. I've seen it from the outside a few times, but I've never actually gone up to the top.

Incorrect verb form: after 'have/has' (present perfect) the main verb must be in past participle. 'Go' should be 'gone.' Duplicate 'go' is a typing error. Maintain present perfect because the experiences relate to life up to now.

× It looks like super modern and kind of architecture, so I like to go to it.

✓ It looks super modern and has an interesting design, so I would like to visit it.

'Like super modern' is informal; 'kind of architecture' is vague and ungrammatical—use 'has an interesting design' or 'is an interesting example of modern architecture.' 'Like to go to it' should be 'would like to visit it' for clarity and politeness.

× Yes, I think I would love the feeling of living in a tall beauty because I always want to have an idea to see the different views of the city from different times.

✓ Yes, I think I would love the feeling of living in a tall building because I always want to be able to see different views of the city at different times.

Wrong noun 'beauty' should be 'building' or 'tower.' 'Have an idea to see' is incorrect collocation; use 'be able to see' or 'have the chance to see.' 'From different times' should be 'at different times.'

× During daytime I can see some clouds running in the street and in the night I will see different lights shining in the city.

✓ During the daytime I can see clouds moving across the streets, and at night I can see different lights shining in the city.

Tense and preposition consistency: 'running in the street' is odd for clouds—use 'moving across the streets.' Use consistent present tense 'can see' rather than switching to 'will see.' Use 'at night' rather than 'in the night.' 'During the daytime' is more natural.