旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, make one clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., “I love” used three times), correct grammar (use “out of the window” or “out the window,” use gerunds correctly), and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscapes. For example, I like photographing fields and old houses, which helps me relax and clears my mind. Also, when the view is especially beautiful, I stay quiet and just enjoy it.

建議: Good content and relevant examples, but improve grammar (use singular/plural correctly: “scenery” or “scenes”), tighten phrasing, and link ideas with a connector. Be specific about why you take photos and give one brief example of a memorable photo. Keep answers concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

範例: Yes, I often photograph scenes outside the window, such as rice fields, mountains, and winding roads, because I want to capture unique moments. For instance, once I photographed a group of grazing buffaloes at sunset, and that picture reminds me of the peaceful countryside.

建議: Clear preference and reason — good. Improve fluency and grammatical accuracy (e.g., “gives me peace”), avoid redundant phrases, and expand slightly with a linking phrase or a brief comparison to make the answer more natural. One concise supporting detail or example will strengthen the response.

範例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because the ocean calms me and helps me relax. For example, listening to the waves at the beach makes me feel peaceful, whereas mountains feel more energetic and lively.

× As someone who loves traveling, I love looking out in the window of the bus or in the car because I love to watch scenarios, the landscapes and I like taking pictures of them because it refreshes my mind and it also like give cool to the eyes.

✓ As someone who loves travelling, I love looking out of the window of the bus or car because I love to watch scenes and landscapes, and I like taking pictures of them because it refreshes my mind and is also pleasing to the eyes.

Errors involve incorrect preposition + -ing usage and informal wording. 'Traveling' (American) is acceptable but keep consistent; 'travelling' (British) also fine. Use 'looking out of the window' not 'looking out in the window'. 'Scenarios' is incorrect for scenery; use 'scenes' or 'landscapes'. 'It also like give cool to the eyes' mixes structures: use 'is also pleasing to the eyes' or 'also feels cool to the eyes'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions with 'look out of', choose correct nouns for visual elements, and use a proper verb phrase (subject + verb) instead of 'like give'.

× Yes, I take photos of the sceneries a lot like the mountains, the rice fields and even the roads, especially if it is scenic.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery a lot, like mountains, rice fields and even roads, especially if they are scenic.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Also 'it is scenic' mismatches with plural nouns; use 'they are scenic'. Suggestions: use uncountable form 'scenery' and make verbs/pronouns agree in number with the noun ('they are').

× Also some animals if they are on the view and I love enjoying what I see.

✓ Also some animals if they are in view, and I enjoy what I see.

'On the view' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in view' or 'in sight'. 'I love enjoying' is awkward; use 'I enjoy'. Suggestions: use common collocations ('in view', 'in sight') and prefer simple verbs ('enjoy') for clarity.

× Mountains and seas are both good sceneries, but I prefer sea more than mountains because when I see the ocean it relaxes my mind and it also give me peace.

✓ Mountains and the sea are both beautiful scenery, but I prefer the sea to the mountains because when I see the ocean it relaxes my mind and also gives me peace.

Multiple issues: 'sceneries' is incorrect—use uncountable 'scenery'. Use 'the sea' as a specific noun and compare correctly: 'prefer the sea to the mountains', not 'prefer sea more than mountains'. Subject-verb agreement error: 'it also give me peace' should be 'gives'. Suggestions: use 'the sea' and 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons, keep 'scenery' uncountable, and ensure verbs agree with subjects.