旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., saying both “very much fond of traveling” and “whenever I go anywhere”). Use a natural phrase for location like “outside” rather than “at the outside.”

範例: Yes — I usually sit by the window when I travel by bus so I can enjoy the passing scenery. For example, I like watching city parks and rivers go by because it helps me relax and notice local life.

建議: Start with a direct, grammatical topic sentence and follow with specific details. Fix verb forms and remove hesitations. Mention frequency and one reason for doing it to add content. Keep within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “usually” or “sometimes.”

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window. I usually use my phone and occasionally a camera, and I post my favourite shots on social media to share the places I visit with friends.

建議: Give a clear, concise preference sentence, then support it with precise reasons and avoid filler words (uh). Use comparative language correctly (e.g., “prefer the mountains to the sea”) and provide realistic, specific examples. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy the dramatic scenery and the chance to see wildlife. For example, on a recent trip I saw peacocks and deer on the hillside, which made the experience more memorable.

× Yes, I'm very much fond of traveling, so whenever I go anywhere, I use the public transport.

✓ Yes, I'm very fond of traveling, so whenever I go anywhere, I use public transport.

'Very much fond of' is not natural; 'very fond of' is correct. 'The public transport' is incorrect article usage for the uncountable concept; use 'public transport' without 'the'. Use present simple 'I use' is fine.

× It's a bus. Then I sit near the window and enjoy the beautiful view at the outside.

✓ I take the bus. Then I sit near the window and enjoy the beautiful view outside.

'It's a bus' is unnatural for the idea of using bus; 'I take the bus' is idiomatic. 'At the outside' is incorrect preposition use; 'outside' or 'from the outside' is correct. Omit 'the' before 'outside' in this context.

× Yes, when I travelling to somewhere I use.

✓ Yes, when I am traveling somewhere, I take photos.

'When I travelling' is missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous. 'To somewhere I use' is ungrammatical and unclear; specify action 'I take photos' and correct word order. Use present continuous 'am traveling' for ongoing action.

× I used to take photos in with my with my phone or sometimes with my camera and I also put on my status and my stories to show my friends as well.

✓ I take photos with my phone or sometimes with my camera, and I also post them on my status and stories to show my friends.

'Used to' implies past habit; context is general present, so use 'I take'. Remove duplicated 'with my'. 'Take photos in with' is wrong preposition sequence; use 'with' to indicate device. 'Put on my status' is unnatural; use 'post them on my status'.

× I prefer mountains more rather than sea because whenever I travel to the mountains, uh, its views are so, uh, so gorgeous as compared to the sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains rather than the sea because whenever I travel to the mountains, their views are so gorgeous compared to the sea.

Use definite articles 'the mountains' and 'the sea' when speaking generally about those environments. 'Its views' is incorrect because plural 'mountains' requires 'their views'. Remove filler 'more' with 'rather than' to avoid redundancy.

× Uh, and I also saw the, uh, large amount of animals like tigers or Peacocks there.

✓ I also saw many animals there, like tigers and peacocks.

'Large amount of' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable 'animals' use 'many' or 'a large number of'. Capitalization: 'peacocks' should be lowercase. Use 'and' not 'or' when giving examples observed.