旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly long and contains some small grammar and word-choice errors. To improve, make the topic sentence concise, correct tense and plural forms (e.g., "when I traveled to Korea last month"), and use one or two specific supporting details linked with a cohesive connector (e.g., "for example" or "so"). Keep to no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes and daily life. For example, when I traveled to Korea last month, I photographed the countryside, rolling hills and small farms to remember the trip.

建議: Good content and clear preference, but grammar and cohesion need polishing. Fix word order and a stray phrase at the end ("my friends" should be integrated properly). Use a linking word to explain why you take photos and keep sentences concise. Vary vocabulary appropriately ("mighty rivers" is fine but ensure natural collocation).

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car, especially when I visit natural areas, because I want to preserve memories. I usually capture rolling hills, coastal views and wide rivers, then share my best shots with friends.

建議: Strong content with specific reasons and feelings. Improve grammar and cohesion: correct missing verb and agreement ("they are often very different"), combine short sentences using linking words (e.g., "however", "and") to sound more fluent, and avoid slight repetition. Keep within five sentences.

範例: I like both the mountains and the sea because they are very different but equally beautiful. I prefer the mountains for their dramatic ranges and quiet hiking trails, which energize me, while the sea relaxes me with its wide horizon and clear water.

× I enjoy watching the changing landscape and people going about their life.

✓ I enjoy watching the changing landscape and people going about their lives.

The pronoun 'their' must agree in number with 'people' (plural). 'Life' should be plural 'lives' to match plural subject. Use 'their lives' for clarity and grammatical agreement.

× For example, when I travel to Korea last month, I took lots of photo and video of the countryside, the rolling hills and small farms.

✓ For example, when I traveled to Korea last month, I took lots of photos and videos of the countryside, the rolling hills, and small farms.

The time marker 'last month' requires the past tense 'traveled' (not 'travel'). Also 'lots of photo and video' has count noun errors: use plural count nouns 'photos' and 'videos'. Add commas for clarity.

× I really like capturing rolling hills, coastal views, and mighty rivers to preserve memories and share the best shots, my friends.

✓ I really like capturing rolling hills, coastal views, and mighty rivers to preserve memories and share the best shots with my friends.

The preposition 'with' is missing before 'my friends' to show the relationship; this is an incorrect use/omission of a function word. Including 'with' corrects the phrase to indicate sharing with friends.

× I prefer both the mountains and the sea because they often very different but beautiful natural views.

✓ I prefer both the mountains and the sea because they are often very different but beautiful natural views.

The linking verb 'are' is missing; the sentence needs present tense 'are' to connect subject 'they' and complement 'very different'. This is a present tense verb omission error.

× I enjoy the mountains for their breathtaking ranges and quiet hiking trails, which makes me feel energized.

✓ I enjoy the mountains for their breathtaking ranges and quiet hiking trails, which make me feel energized.

Relative clause 'which make' refers to 'ranges and trails' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'make' not singular 'makes' to agree with the plural antecedent.

× The wide horizon and crystal clear water help me relax and forget everyday worries.

✓ The wide horizon and the crystal-clear water help me relax and forget everyday worries.

Parallel noun phrases benefit from consistent article use; adding 'the' before 'crystal-clear water' improves cohesion. Also 'crystal clear' as a compound adjective is better hyphenated when placed before a noun.