旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and double negatives. Improve vocabulary (e.g., “look at the scenery”, “prefer to”).

範例: I don't usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car. Instead, I prefer to scroll through my phone or chat with friends because it helps me pass the time. However, if the landscape is interesting, I might glance up to enjoy it.

建議: Give a clear direct answer, then provide a concise, specific reason. Use linking words like "because" and correct grammar (e.g., "my photos are not very good quality"). Avoid repetition and informal spoken hesitations.

範例: No, I usually don't take photos from a car window because my pictures tend to be blurry and the scenery is often unremarkable. If I see something exceptional, I will stop and take photos instead.

建議: Answer directly and expand with two specific reasons connected by linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "altitude" instead of "attitude") and concise phrasing. Limit to up to five sentences and avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and camping in cooler, quieter surroundings. Also, the panoramic views from higher altitudes are more impressive to me than coastal scenery.

× Not always, I prefer to scroll my phone, uh, browse on social media or chat with my friends or family or umm, I just read the book or listen to music, uh, outside, uh, it's usually not nothing to seem that much, so I don't prefer to wash the scenery.

✓ Not always. I prefer to scroll on my phone, browse social media, or chat with my friends or family. Sometimes I just read a book or listen to music. Outside, there usually isn't much to see, so I don't prefer to watch the scenery.

Adverb placement and word choice errors: 'scroll my phone' should be 'scroll on my phone'; 'browse on social media' -> 'browse social media'; run-on sentence needed splitting into shorter sentences for clarity. 'it's usually not nothing to seem that much' is a double negative and incorrect phrasing; correct to 'there usually isn't much to see' (There-be/existence and negation). 'wash the scenery' is wrong verb; use 'watch the scenery'. Suggestions: split long sentences, place adverbs close to the verbs they modify, avoid double negatives, use correct verb collocations like 'scroll on', 'browse', 'watch'.

× Not, not ready 'cause my photos are not very in good quality and then the scenery usually it's not very promising for beautiful photographs.

✓ No, not really, because my photos are not of very good quality, and the scenery usually isn't very promising for beautiful photographs.

'Not ready' is unnatural here; use 'not really'. Word order and adjective use: 'not very in good quality' is incorrect order; correct form is 'not of very good quality'. Also misuse of 'it's' creates redundant subject; use 'the scenery usually isn't'. Suggestions: use correct adjective order and preposition 'of' with 'quality', avoid redundant pronouns, and use concise connectors like 'because' and 'and'.

× I prefer the mountains, I like the hiking there, the camping, just I prefer the the view from the higher attitude than the sea level.

✓ I prefer the mountains. I like hiking and camping there. I just prefer the view from higher altitudes rather than at sea level.

Preposition and noun choice errors: 'the hiking' and 'the camping' are unnecessary articles; use 'hiking' and 'camping'. 'the the view' has duplication. 'higher attitude' is incorrect word choice; correct is 'higher altitude' or 'higher altitudes'. Use comparative phrase 'rather than at sea level' to compare correctly. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, choose correct nouns ('altitude'), and use 'rather than' or 'than' with appropriate prepositional phrase.