旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like "uh" and "umm." Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "different view" → "different views"; "from away cities" → "from distant towns").

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, on long journeys I enjoy watching changing landscapes, such as fields, mountains and distant towns, because they make the trip more interesting.

建議: Give a direct answer then add a specific reason or brief example. Reduce repetition and improve grammar (e.g., "I do take pictures, especially"; "nature views" plural). Use a linking word like "because" or "for example."

範例: Yes, I do take pictures of the scenery, especially when I see mountains. For example, I often stop to photograph a dramatic ridge because I love preserving the memory of natural views.

建議: Answer directly with a clear preference or explain you like both, then give specific contrasting details using linking words. Remove hesitations and clarify unclear phrases (e.g., "how it formed" → "how they were formed"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the dramatic views. However, I also love the sea for its calming sound and fresh air, so I often choose my destination depending on whether I want activity or relaxation.

× Yes, of course I often, uh, look at the window, but when I'm traveling by bus or car, especially if it's a long ride, I love umm, looking at the window since I can see different places and different view from mountains or from away cities in our travel.

✓ Yes, of course I often look out the window, but when I'm traveling by bus or car, especially on a long ride, I love looking out the window because I can see different places and views, such as mountains or distant cities during our trip.

This sentence has several issues: incorrect preposition use ('at the window' should be 'out the window'), redundant words ('umm', 'uh', 'I love umm, looking'), wrong phrase order ('different places and different view' should be 'different places and views'), incorrect preposition for distant cities ('from away cities' should be 'distant cities'), and word choice for travel ('in our travel' should be 'during our trip'). Suggestions: remove filler words, use 'look out the window', replace 'if it's a long ride' with 'on a long ride', use 'because' for cause, pluralize 'views', and use 'distant cities' or 'cities in the distance' and 'during our trip'.

× Yes I of course I do pictures specially if it's a nice view and it's mountains.

✓ Yes, of course I take pictures, especially if it's a nice view or there are mountains.

Errors: missing verb form and repetition ('Yes I of course I' -> 'Yes, of course I'), incorrect verb collocation ('do pictures' -> 'take pictures'), spelling ('specially' -> 'especially'), article and number use for 'mountains' (need 'there are mountains' or 'the mountains'). Suggestions: use 'take pictures', remove repeated words, use 'especially', and express mountains with 'there are mountains' or 'if there are mountains'.

× Since I love mountains and nature view I usually take a picture of it.

✓ Since I love mountains and natural scenery, I usually take pictures of them.

Problems: 'nature view' is incorrect collocation—use 'natural scenery' or 'the scenery', singular/plural and pronoun mismatch ('a picture of it' is unclear when referring to plural 'mountains and scenery'). Suggestions: use plural 'pictures' to match plural subjects and refer back with 'them', or use singular forms consistently ('the scenery' and 'a picture of it').

× Well, I do prefer both because I love when I see nature, umm specially the sounds of the sea and the view of the mountains.

✓ Well, I prefer both because I love experiencing nature, especially the sound of the sea and the view of the mountains.

Issues: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' before 'prefer' (can be used for emphasis but sounds odd here), awkward clause 'because I love when I see nature' (better 'I love experiencing nature'), filler 'umm', spelling 'specially' -> 'especially', plural/singular consistency ('sounds' -> 'sound'). Suggestions: remove filler words, use 'prefer' without 'do', use 'experiencing nature', and use 'sound of the sea' and 'view of the mountains'.

× I love how it formed and how it goes by.

✓ I love how they are formed and how they change over time.

Problems: unclear pronoun reference ('it' unclear for mountains/sea), incorrect verb forms ('formed' passive without context, 'how it goes by' is unidiomatic). Suggestions: refer clearly to the subject ('they' for mountains and the sea or 'the landscape'), use appropriate verb forms ('are formed' for formation, 'change over time' or 'stretch out' for appearance).