旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법과 시제 사용이 일관되지 않고, 불필요한 중복과 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 응답은 직접적인 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 추가 설명은 연결어(예: "because", "so", "for example")를 사용해 논리적으로 이어야 합니다. 구체적인 이유(예: 어떤 날씨 변화, 어떤 풍경을 관찰하는지)를 한두 문장으로 명확히 제시하세요. 문장 수는 최대 5문장으로 유지하고 중복 표현(예: "I really like to I really like to")을 피하세요.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching how the weather and landscape change. For example, I like seeing farms, small towns, and different cloud formations, which helps me relax. Sometimes I also notice local life, such as people working in fields or children playing, which makes the journey interesting.

建議: 응답이 불분명하고 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 이유를 말할 때는 구체적인 설명(예: 어떤 풍경을 찍는지, 언제 사진을 찍는지)과 연결어를 사용하세요. 또한 불필요한 단어(예: "the cars, the driver, the cars and the BA")는 제거하고 의미 있는 세부사항을 추가하세요. 문법(특히 시제와 수 일치)을 정확히 하고 간결하게 말하세요.

範例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because I find the scenery beautiful, especially at sunrise or when passing the countryside. I usually capture wide views of fields or interesting cloud patterns, and sometimes I share the best shots with my friends.

建議: 응답은 간단히 선호를 밝히고 이유를 제시했지만 문법(복수/단수, 관사 사용)과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 더 구체적인 이유(예: 소리, 활동, 기분 등)를 연결어로 확장해 주장을 뒷받침하세요. 문장을 자연스럽게 구성하고 중복을 줄이세요.

範例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the relaxing sound of waves and the open views from the beach. For instance, walking along the shore and watching boats or tide pools makes me feel calm and refreshed, which is why I choose the seaside over the mountains.

× Yes, I normally did it.

✓ Yes, I usually do it.

'Did' is past tense but the question asks about habitual behavior in general, so present simple 'do' is required. Use 'usually' instead of 'normally' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use present simple for routines (I usually do this).

× I looked the windows because the the weather is really good and then the the weather is really different in the normal days.

✓ I look at the windows because the weather is usually very nice and different from normal days.

Mixed past 'looked' with present descriptions; use present simple 'look' for habitual action. Use correct verb pattern 'look at' not 'look the'. Remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'different from' to compare, and 'usually' for frequency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct preposition 'at'. Use 'different from' for comparisons.

× So I really like to I really like to looks and observe some the.

✓ So I really like to look and observe things.

Use base verb 'look' after 'like to'; 'looks' is third person singular form and incorrect here. 'Some the' is ungrammatical; use 'things' or 'the scenery'. Suggestion: after 'like to' use base verb and choose correct noun 'things' or 'the scenery'.

× Yes, that was also.

✓ Yes, I do that too.

'Was' is past tense and vague; the question asks about habitual current behavior, so use present simple 'do'. 'Also' is better as 'too' in this short response. Suggestion: use present tense for routines.

× I normally did it because the cars, the driver, the cars and the BA.

✓ I usually do it because the scenery outside the car is beautiful and the driver lets me take photos.

Original is disjointed and unclear ('BA' unclear). Changed to a coherent sentence: use present simple 'do' for habitual action and clarify reason. Suggestion: make sentences complete and clear, avoid unexplained abbreviations.

× The outside of the window is really beautiful and I love to take some photos and feeling.

✓ The view outside the window is beautiful and I love to take photos and enjoy the feeling.

Use 'view' or 'scenery' instead of 'outside of the window'. 'Take some photos' is okay but 'and feeling' is ungrammatical; change to 'and enjoy the feeling' or 'and capture the feeling in photos'. Suggestion: use nouns appropriately and complete verb phrases.

× I prefer them seas because I love the seeing the nature of the Seas on the beach and all kinds of the structures with the seas.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love seeing the nature at the seaside and the different formations on the beach.

'Them seas' is incorrect; use singular 'the sea' or 'the seas' depending on meaning. 'Love the seeing' should be 'love seeing'. 'Nature of the Seas' is awkward; use 'nature at the seaside' or 'coastal scenery'. 'All kinds of the structures with the seas' is unclear; 'different formations' or 'structures on the beach' is better. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms and simplify phrases for clarity.

× So I love the sea.

✓ So I love the sea.

This sentence is correct in present simple expressing a general preference. No change needed.