旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, use correct tense and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar errors (e.g., use present simple or present continuous appropriately) and remove repetitions.

範例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, I like watching farmlands and forests pass by, and it helps me relax and put my phone away during the journey.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer sentence structure. Use correct verb forms and link ideas with words like 'because' or 'so'. Give one specific example of what you photograph to make your answer more concrete.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car because I enjoy photography. For instance, I like to capture interesting details such as a row of old houses, a colorful field, or a dramatic cloud formation that I can later edit and keep.

建議: Give a clear direct answer (choose one or say you like both), then explain briefly with a specific reason. Avoid hesitations and incorrect grammar; keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'because'.

範例: I like both, but if I had to choose I would prefer the mountains because they offer broader views and cleaner air. For example, hiking to a summit lets me see valleys and distant peaks, which I find more refreshing than the sea.

× Absolutely yes, as I think it's a really great time while you, you was, uh, going on a travel to see a lot of different kinds of landscape.

✓ Absolutely yes, as I think it's a really great time while you are traveling to see a lot of different kinds of landscapes.

The original uses 'was' incorrectly for present continuous context and 'going on a travel' is unidiomatic. Use present continuous 'are traveling' for general situations, and plural 'landscapes' for multiple kinds. Suggest using 'traveling' or 'travelling' and pluralizing 'landscape'. (Grammar problem type ID: 2)

× You haven't had a chance to sing before and it's a good, good way to put down your phone to, uh, to.

✓ You haven't had a chance to see them before, and it's a good way to put down your phone.

Sentence is unclear: 'sing' seems wrong and the verb phrase repeats 'to'. Changed to 'see them' (the views) to match context and removed redundancy. Also combined clauses for fluency. This corrects pronoun/reference and awkward wording. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Absolutely yes, as I really enjoy photographing, so it's a good opportunity for me to take a diverse, uh, landscape during I was go on a travel and if I have a chance, I would like to grab some detail thing that I.

✓ Absolutely yes, I really enjoy photographing, so it's a good opportunity for me to take diverse landscape photos while I am traveling, and if I have a chance, I would like to capture some detailed shots.

Mixed tenses and unidiomatic phrases: 'during I was go on a travel' is incorrect. Use present continuous 'while I am traveling' for ongoing/general situations. 'Diverse landscape' should be 'diverse landscape photos' and 'grab some detail thing' becomes 'capture some detailed shots'. Overall maintain present tense and use appropriate nouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Well, definitely I don't set the boundary between these two. I both of these kinds of landscape.

✓ Well, I definitely don't set a boundary between the two; I like both kinds of landscape.

Original has incorrect structure: 'I both of these kinds' is ungrammatical. Use 'I like both kinds of landscape' and 'set a boundary' needs an article. Reordered for natural English. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I really love to do so I find myself, uh, prefer to go to the a mountain as, uh, I could have a broader view when I in the.

✓ I really love them, but I find myself preferring to go to the mountains because I can have a broader view when I am there.

Problems: 'prefer to go to the a mountain' has extra article and wrong number; use plural 'mountains' or singular 'a mountain' consistently. 'Find myself prefer' should be 'find myself preferring' (gerund). 'When I in the' is incomplete; use 'when I am there'. Maintain present tense and correct form. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)