旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and natural, but it is slightly repetitive ("enjoy the scenery" / "enjoy the view") and a little long. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Vary vocabulary (e.g., "landscape," "scenery," "views") and avoid repeating the same idea. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes. For example, when I visit a new city I often photograph interesting buildings or parks to remember the trip. I also sometimes share the best shots online.

建議: The answer is understandable and gives reasons, but it is a bit disorganized and repetitive ("I always look outside" / "So yes I do") and contains some grammar issues (e.g., "when whenever I wake up"). Improve coherence by using a linking word to structure reasons and by correcting grammar. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences and include one specific example to strengthen the response.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I like to capture memorable scenes. For instance, on a recent trip I photographed a string of old houses and a river that looked beautiful at sunset. However, if I'm very tired I might sleep and miss some views.

建議: Your preference is clear and you provide reasons, which is good. However, the response has a few awkward phrases ("gigantic structure," "entices me a lot") and a sentence fragment ("Contrary to the seas."). Improve by using smoother linking (e.g., "because" / "whereas") and by giving one specific example or memory that explains your fear of the sea. Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy their dramatic peaks and the variety of plants and trails. For example, hiking in the foothills last year I loved the fresh air and views, whereas I feel uneasy around deep water and large waves, so I avoid the sea.

× Yes, I usually look out the window when I'm traveling by bus or by car.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or by car.

Use the preposition 'out of' for looking from inside to outside; this is an incorrect use of prepositions. Replace 'out the window' with 'out of the window' to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: Practice preposition patterns with verbs of motion and perception (e.g., look out of, look at, look through).

× Usually when I'm traveling to a new place, I like to take pictures of the view outside to give for memories and also to post online.

✓ Usually when I'm traveling to a new place, I like to take pictures of the view outside to keep as memories and also to post online.

The phrase 'give for memories' is ungrammatical; the correct verb phrase is 'keep as memories'. This is an incorrect use of verbs/phrasing. Use 'keep' with the noun 'memories', and 'as' to indicate function. Suggestion: Learn common collocations (keep memories, make memories, take photos for memories).

× Yes, I usually take pictures outside the car window when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures through the car window when I'm traveling.

The phrase 'take pictures outside the car window' suggests taking photos outside the car rather than from inside; 'through the car window' or 'from the car window' is clearer. This is an incorrect adverb/preposition choice affecting meaning. Suggestion: Use precise prepositions to indicate perspective (from/through the car window).

× But sometimes I get sleepy when whenever I wake up I will look outside especially if I'm going to a new place.

✓ But sometimes I get sleepy; whenever I wake up, I look outside, especially if I'm going to a new place.

The original sentence mixes 'when' and 'whenever' redundantly and uses inconsistent tense/modal 'will'. This is an incorrect conjunction and sentence structure issue. Use one temporal connector ('whenever') and simple present 'look' for habitual action. Suggestion: Use consistent temporal markers and present simple for habits (whenever I wake up, I look).

× I love the mountains more than the seas, and this is because the mountains have this gigantic structure and beautiful flora that entices me a lot.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because they have a dramatic landscape and beautiful plant life that really appeals to me.

Problems: 'more than the seas' is awkward (use 'prefer...to'), 'gigantic structure' is unnatural for mountains, and 'flora that entices me a lot' is awkward collocation. This combines comparative and word choice issues and sentence structure. Use 'prefer X to Y', 'sea' (uncountable), and natural collocations like 'appeals to me' or 'attracts me'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons, use singular 'sea' when speaking generally, and choose natural adjectives/collocations (dramatic landscape, plant life, appeals to me).

× Contrary to the seas.

✓ By contrast, I feel uneasy about large bodies of water.

The fragment 'Contrary to the seas.' is an incomplete sentence (no verb) and uses 'seas' awkwardly. This is a sentence structure error and article/number choice issue. Replace the fragment with a complete clause conveying the intended contrast. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence has a subject and verb. Use 'large bodies of water' for clarity.