旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency: remove hesitation words, correct verb forms, and keep sentences concise (maximum 5). Add one specific example to make the answer more informative. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy gazing out of the window when I travel because it gives me time to relax. For example, on a recent bus trip through the countryside I watched the changing sky and green fields, which made me feel calm and refreshed.

建議: Work on coherence and accuracy: avoid short fragmented sentences and hesitations, and correct unclear words (e.g. 'Skype' likely meant 'sky'). Combine related ideas into one or two clear sentences and give a concrete example of sharing or using the photos.

範例: Yes, I often photograph scenery from the window because I like sharing beautiful views with my family. For instance, last month I sent a photo of a dramatic sunset over the hills to my parents and we talked about the trip for days.

建議: Make the answer complete and grammatical: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting reasons with specific detail. Remove repetitions and hesitations. Use linking words (because, so) to connect reason and example, and finish the sentence with a clear point.

範例: I prefer the sea because its sound and smell help me relax and think clearly. For example, when I walk along the beach I focus on the waves and breathe more deeply, which helps me feel refreshed and less stressed.

× Yes, I love to gazing out of the window while I'm traveling because, uh, it gives me a moment to myself and I feel more relaxed and calm.

✓ Yes, I love gazing out of the window while I'm traveling because it gives me a moment to myself and I feel more relaxed and calm.

Using 'love to gazing' mixes the infinitive marker 'to' with a gerund '-ing'. After 'love' we can use either the infinitive ('love to gaze') or the gerund ('love gazing'), but not both. Remove 'to' to use the gerund form which fits the continuous action described. Note: also remove filler 'uh' and the comma before 'it' for clarity.

× I especially love to watch the skies and uh, water if I am passing through a coastal route.

✓ I especially love to watch the sky and the water when I am passing through a coastal area.

'Skies' is acceptable but 'the sky' is more natural here; 'water' usually takes 'the' when specific; 'through a coastal route' is awkward: use 'through a coastal area' or 'along a coastal route'. Also replace 'if' with 'when' to indicate typical occurrence rather than conditional.

× Yes, I do capture the moments.

✓ Yes, I capture the moments.

Using 'do' for emphasis is possible ('I do capture'), but in natural speech 'I capture the moments' is simpler and grammatically correct. No gerund issue here beyond unnecessary auxiliary.

× Uh. Because I can share it with my friends and family.

✓ I take photos because I can share them with my friends and family.

The original is a sentence fragment starting with a conjunction 'Because' and an isolated 'Uh.' Combine ideas into one complete sentence and ensure plural agreement: 'photos' -> 'them'. This correction addresses sentence completeness and pronoun agreement.

× And when I just feel nostalgic, I just get back into my gallery and I just, uh, go through the images or the photos that I've captured.

✓ And when I feel nostalgic, I go into my gallery and go through the images or photos that I have captured.

Avoid repetitive 'just' and filler 'uh'. Use consistent verb forms: 'I've captured' -> 'I have captured' is fine but keep consistent style. The pronouns are fine; main issue is redundancy and style rather than pronoun grammar.

× So I especially take the photos of Skype.

✓ So I especially take photos of the sky.

'Skype' is a brand name for video calling and is incorrect here. The intended noun is 'sky'. This is a lexical error rather than a listed grammar category, but correcting it is necessary for meaning.

× I prefer sea because it helps me to calm myself and helps me to connect within and whenever I am walking on a I'm just walking.

✓ I prefer the sea because it helps me calm myself and helps me to connect within, and whenever I am walking — I just take a walk near the beach because I feel better.

Use the definite article 'the sea' when speaking generally about the sea as a concept. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps me' ('helps me calm myself' is more natural). The original contains repetition and sentence fragments; restructure for clarity. 'Walking on a I'm just walking' is ungrammatical and needed rephrasing. Also add 'better' to complete the thought.

× I just take a walk near to umm a beach because I feel.

✓ I just take a walk near a beach because I feel calmer.

'Near to' is unnecessary in many varieties of English; 'near a beach' is enough. The sentence ends abruptly with 'because I feel.' Complete the clause with a suitable adjective such as 'calmer' to convey the intended meaning.