旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Fix verb forms and word choice (e.g., “look out,” “whenever I travel,” “scenery,” “lots of scenery”).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel. For example, when I travel by car I often see green hills and small villages, which I find calming.

建議: Answer directly and organize your reply: a clear yes/no topic sentence, then one or two specific details linked logically. Use correct tense and pronouns, and avoid redundancy (e.g., “sometimes,” “other times”).

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery, especially when I see interesting views like a sunrise or a river. However, sometimes I prefer just to watch and enjoy the view without taking pictures.

建議: Give a clear preference sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one concrete example. Improve grammar (e.g., “give me peaceful energy,” “they make me feel relaxed and refreshed”). Keep it within four sentences max.

範例: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel peaceful and relaxed. For instance, when I hike in the hills I enjoy fresh air and quiet paths, which helps me forget daily stress.

× Yes I do, I always lookout the window whenever I traveling anywhere.

✓ Yes, I do. I always look out the window whenever I travel anywhere.

Original uses 'lookout' (a noun) instead of the phrasal verb 'look out' and 'I traveling' which incorrectly uses the -ing form where the simple present 'I travel' is required. Use the base verb 'look out' for habitual actions and simple present 'travel' for routines: 'I always look out the window whenever I travel.' Suggestion: Separate clauses with a period or comma and use correct phrasal verb and simple present verb forms.

× This scenario is so beautiful and even we look lots of scenario like a mountain greenery.

✓ The scenery is very beautiful, and we see many scenes such as mountains and greenery.

'Scenario' is the wrong lexical choice for 'scenery'. 'So' is informal; 'very' is clearer. 'We look lots of scenario' mixes incorrect verb and quantifier: use 'see many scenes' or 'many views'. 'Mountain greenery' needs article/parallel structure: 'such as mountains and greenery.' Suggestion: Use 'scenery' and 'see many views' and list examples clearly.

× Of course the scenario is beautiful, then absolutely I take the photos of that only sometime others time I enjoying you just by seeing so.

✓ Of course the scenery is beautiful, so I always take photos of it; sometimes other times I just enjoy looking at it.

Use 'the scenery' not 'scenario'. 'Then absolutely' is awkward; use 'so' or 'therefore'. 'Take the photos of that only' is ungrammatical—use 'take photos of it'. 'Sometime others time I enjoying you just by seeing so' has multiple errors: 'sometimes' (adverb), 'other times' for contrast, and 'I enjoying you just by seeing so' should be 'I just enjoy looking at it.' Ensure correct verb forms: 'enjoy' not 'enjoying'. Suggestion: Break into clearer clauses, use 'sometimes' and 'other times' and the base verb 'enjoy' with the gerund 'looking'.

× I prefer mountains because mountains give us so much peaceful energy and give us relax.

✓ I prefer the mountains because they give us a peaceful feeling and help us relax.

Use definite article 'the mountains' when speaking generally about that category. 'Give us so much peaceful energy' is awkward and uncountable: use 'give us a peaceful feeling' or 'a sense of peace'. 'Give us relax' is incorrect—use 'help us relax.' Suggestion: Use 'the mountains' and idiomatic expressions like 'a peaceful feeling' and 'help us relax.'

× Whenever I travel through the mountain I feel like relax and it's make us feel fresh.

✓ Whenever I travel through the mountains, I feel relaxed and it makes me feel refreshed.

'Travel through the mountain' should be plural 'mountains' for general meaning. 'I feel like relax' is incorrect; use adjective 'relaxed' or 'I feel relaxed.' 'It's make us feel fresh' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun problems: 'it makes me feel refreshed.' Use 'makes' for third person singular and 'me' for the speaker. 'Fresh' is better as 'refreshed.' Suggestion: Use plural 'mountains', correct adjective 'relaxed', third-person singular verb 'makes', and appropriate pronoun 'me'.