旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Correct subject-verb agreement (“make” → “makes”) and awkward phrases (“avoid swallowing on my phone”) — replace with “staring at my phone.” Keep answers natural and within 2–3 sentences: give a clear topic sentence then one supporting detail with a linking phrase.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because watching the countryside pass by relaxes me and helps the journey feel shorter. For example, I enjoy noticing changing fields and small villages, which distracts me from checking my phone.

建議: Be precise and avoid odd phrases. “Train queue surrounding” is unclear; use correct nouns (e.g., “landscape” or “scenery”) and avoid overly long compound sentences. Use linking words (for example, because) sparingly and keep to two sentences: a direct answer plus a clear reason or example.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car because I want to remember interesting landscapes. For example, I’ll photograph misty fields or colourful sunsets and later choose the best shots to share with my family.

建議: Good direct answer and relevant reasons. Improve cohesion by using a linking phrase and expand slightly with a specific example to add richness. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences) and avoid switching terms abruptly (‘Highlands’ vs ‘mountains’)—use consistent vocabulary.

範例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and learning about marine life in documentaries. However, I also enjoy the mountains for hiking and spotting wildlife when I want a quieter getaway.

× Yes, I always gaze outside the window as soon as I hit the road because watching the countryside go by make me feel relaxed and pass the time.

✓ Yes, I always gaze outside the window as soon as I hit the road because watching the countryside go by makes me feel relaxed and helps pass the time.

The verb must agree with the singular subject 'watching the countryside go by' (a gerund phrase treated as singular). Use 'makes' not 'make'. Also add 'helps' before 'pass the time' to form a correct verb phrase; 'pass the time' needs an auxiliary verb here. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree in number with their subjects and include necessary auxiliary verbs for idiomatic expressions. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× It's also a good way to avoid swallowing on my phone, which is better for my eyes.

✓ It's also a good way to avoid staring at my phone, which is better for my eyes.

The verb 'swallowing' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'staring at' or 'looking at' the phone. 'Staring at my phone' is the correct verb phrase. Suggestion: choose the correct verb for the intended action and pair it with the appropriate preposition ('stare at'). Grammar problem type ID:8

× Of course, capturing beautiful landscapes from the car is one of the most enjoyable parts of traveling, so I often take snapshots of the train queue surrounding to reserve memorable moments because a picture is worth 1000 words.

✓ Of course, capturing beautiful landscapes from the car is one of the most enjoyable parts of traveling, so I often take snapshots of the surrounding scenery to preserve memorable moments because a picture is worth 1000 words.

'Snapshots of the train queue surrounding' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'surrounding scenery' to refer to the area outside, and 'to preserve memorable moments' is a better collocation than 'reserve'. Also 'train queue' seems inappropriate; use 'scenery' or 'landscape'. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and prepositions ('surrounding scenery') and choose verbs that collocate with 'moments' ('preserve' or 'capture'). Grammar problem type ID:11

× I am more into the sea because I enjoy swimming and watching marine documentaries.

✓ I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and watching marine documentaries.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'I am more into the sea' is colloquial and less natural in this comparative context. Use 'I prefer the sea' for clearer expression. No strict grammatical error requiring change, but stylistic improvement. Suggestion: use 'prefer' when comparing two options. Grammar problem type ID:22

× That said, Highlands are also appealing with their rich flora and fauna.

✓ That said, the Highlands are also appealing with their rich flora and fauna.

When referring to a specific region 'Highlands' as a proper noun, include the definite article 'the'. Without 'the' the phrase is unidiomatic. Suggestion: use 'the Highlands' when naming that region or 'highland areas' for a general reference. Grammar problem type ID:22