旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Keep the answer concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g. tense, word forms) and choose accurate words (e.g. ‘watch’ or ‘look at’, ‘landscapes’, not ‘licenses’). Limit to 3–4 short sentences to be natural and coherent.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find it relaxing. For example, I often watch changing landscapes and sunrises, which make the journey more interesting. Also, I sometimes notice small details like people working in fields or different buildings, which gives me a sense of the place.

建議: Be clear about actions and reasons. Use simple, accurate sentences: say whether you take photos and why, with one short example. Avoid informal or unclear phrases (‘kinda’, ‘Phil’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ correctly and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to keep memorable moments. For example, last month I photographed a stunning mountain view because the light was beautiful, so I saved the picture to remember the trip.

建議: Give a direct preference first, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Use correct vocabulary (mountains, sea, scenery) and grammatical structures (I prefer the mountains because... ). Avoid invented words and unclear phrases like ‘soar always’ or ‘take the brochures’. Keep to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy greenery and quiet surroundings. For instance, I like hiking among trees and wildflowers, which makes me feel relaxed and close to nature.

× Yes, of course. When I find my trips, it's very boring.

✓ Yes, of course. When I travel, my trips are sometimes very boring.

The original uses incorrect verb 'find' and wrong clause flow. This is sentence structure (26) and present-tense usage. Replace 'find my trips' with 'travel' and make verb agreement consistent: 'my trips are sometimes very boring.' Use simple present for habitual actions.

× I walk outside, I can see different landscape and licenses and or sunrise.

✓ When I look out, I can see different landscapes, lights, or the sunrise.

Original has incorrect verbs and word choices ('walk outside', 'licenses', 'and or'). This is sentence structure (26) and pluralization (1). Use 'look out' or 'look out the window', plural 'landscapes', and correct 'lights' instead of 'licenses'. Use 'or' (not 'and or') and include article 'the sunrise'.

× We see the different situations outside the bus.

✓ We see different situations outside the bus.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'different situations' causing awkwardness (22 Article errors). Remove 'the' for natural phrasing and maintain present simple for habitual observation (27 subject-verb agreement fine).

× Yes, of course, sometimes I kinda the most memorable moments, I think I will capture the scenery or the landscape because Phil is very stunning.

✓ Yes, of course. Sometimes I want to keep the most memorable moments, so I capture the scenery or the landscape because it is very stunning.

Multiple problems: 'kinda' is informal/incorrect here, 'Phil' is likely a typo, and comma splice joins clauses incorrectly. This is sentence structure (26), pronoun/article errors (12/22). Use 'want to keep' or 'want to capture', replace 'Phil' with 'it' referring to the scenery, and separate into two sentences or connect with 'so' for clarity.

× So I took the pictures at that moment.

✓ So I took pictures at that moment.

This sentence is mostly correct but 'the pictures' can be simply 'pictures' unless referring to specific ones. It's past tense (5) which fits 'at that moment'. Keep past tense; adjust article for natural phrasing.

× I prefer to montes a bit on the light green.

✓ I prefer the mountains with light green slopes a bit.

Original contains non-English word 'montes' and awkward structure. This is sentence structure (26) and word choice. Use 'mountains' and describe 'light green slopes' or 'light green scenery' to convey meaning.

× I like appreciate thing different natures such as the trees, flowers, so sometimes I can soar always to take the brochures and in front of the mountains.

✓ I appreciate different aspects of nature, such as trees and flowers, so sometimes I always try to take photos in front of the mountains.

Many errors: wrong verb order 'like appreciate', pluralization and word choice ('thing different natures'), 'soar' and 'brochures' are incorrect here. This fits incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure (13 and 26). Use 'appreciate different aspects of nature', 'take photos' not 'brochures', and place adverbs correctly: 'sometimes I always try' should be 'I always try sometimes' or better 'sometimes I try' — here 'sometimes I try' used.