旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g. "on inside the car" → "inside the car"). Avoid repetition ("people or other vehicles, just people watching").

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I find it more comfortable than staring at my phone, so I often watch buildings, traffic and people on the street, which helps me relax during the journey.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence, then give a concise reason with correct grammar and a linking word. Replace informal fillers and correct verb forms ("just daydreaming" → "and just daydream").

範例: No, I don't usually take photos from a moving vehicle because I feel uncomfortable using my phone while it’s moving. Instead, I prefer to watch the view and daydream, which feels safer and more enjoyable.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with two specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitations and ensure parallel structure (use consistent verb forms: "I like window shopping, going to malls, eating at restaurants, and meeting friends").

範例: Neither; I prefer city life because it offers many activities. For instance, I enjoy window shopping and visiting malls, and I often spend time in restaurants and cafes chatting with friends and family.

× I do that because I don't feel good when looking at my phone on inside the car or the bus, so I often look outside and see people or other vehicles, just people watching.

✓ I do that because I don't feel good looking at my phone inside the car or the bus, so I often look outside and see people or other vehicles, just watching people.

The phrase 'on inside' contains a redundant preposition 'on'. Remove 'on' to use the correct preposition 'inside'. Also 'just people watching' is awkward; change to 'just watching people' to form a correct participle phrase modifying the action. Suggestion: avoid redundant prepositions and place participles after the object they modify.

× Not really because as I said earlier I feel uncomfortable using my phone in a in a moving vehicle so I just people watch and just daydreaming.

✓ Not really, because as I said earlier I feel uncomfortable using my phone in a moving vehicle, so I just people-watch and just daydream.

'Daydreaming' here follows 'just' as part of a compound predicate and needs the base verb form to match the earlier verb 'people-watch'. Use parallel structure: 'people-watch and daydream'. Also remove the duplicate 'a' before 'moving vehicle'. Hyphenate 'people-watch' when used as a verb or use 'watch people'. Ensure verbs in a compound predicate have the same form.

× Neither. I prefer city life uh, I like window shopping, I like malls, going to a restaurant, going to cafes, spend a lot of time with uh, chatting with friends and family cause yeah.

✓ Neither. I prefer city life. I like window shopping, I like malls, going to restaurants, going to cafes, and spending a lot of time chatting with friends and family because of that.

Consistency and number: 'going to a restaurant' and 'going to cafes' should match in number; change 'a restaurant' to 'restaurants' to align with 'cafes' or make both singular. Also 'spend' must be 'spending' to maintain parallel gerund structure after the list of activities. Replace colloquial 'cause yeah' with 'because of that' or 'for that reason' for clarity. Use complete sentences and parallel gerund forms when listing activities.