旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и упрощайте структуру: используйте правильные времена (Present Simple для привычек), убирайте лишние слова и избегайте повторов. Добавьте связующее слово для логичности и одну-две конкретные детали (например, что именно вам нравится в пейзаже). Ограничьте ответ до максимум 3–4 предложений.

範例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy seeing the passing scenery. I also like listening to music during journeys, which makes the trip more relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching mountains and small villages go by.

建議: Уберите заполнители («uh», «um») и избегайте повторов слова "beautiful"; используйте более точную лексику. Дайте причину и конкретный пример для обоснования. Сформулируйте ответ одним коротким вступлением и одним конкретным примером.

範例: Not often, but I sometimes take photos if the view is unusual or impressive. For example, I photographed a dramatic sunset over the hills last month because the colours were incredible.

建議: Избегайте неуклюжих формулировок и объяснений своего выбора; стройте ответ прямо: назывaйте предпочтение и указывайте причину с конкретикой. Можно также добавить сравнение или предсказание. Старайтесь использовать простые правильные времена и варианты словосочетаний (e.g., "I prefer the mountains because...").

範例: I prefer the mountains because I grew up near them and enjoy hiking and fresh air. I haven't visited the sea often, so I feel more comfortable in mountainous areas and like the scenery and trails there.

× I really liked a look out the window when I am traveling by car.

✓ I really like looking out the window when I am traveling by car.

The student used past tense 'liked' and the incorrect phrase 'a look out' instead of the present simple with the present participle 'looking'. Use 'like' (present simple) because the question asks about a habitual action, and use the verb+ing form 'looking' after 'like' to express enjoying an activity. Suggestion: use 'I really like looking out the window' and avoid adding unnecessary articles.

× Also I like listening to music and just I enjoy by the view especially when I'm going to long travel.

✓ Also, I like listening to music and I just enjoy the view, especially when I'm going on a long trip.

Multiple issues: the sentence structure is awkward and contains incorrect preposition and noun choices. 'Just I enjoy by the view' is incorrect: 'enjoy' should take a direct object ('the view') with no 'by'. 'Going to long travel' is incorrect; use 'going on a long trip' for travelling. The corrected version uses proper conjunctions, article 'the' and preposition 'on'.

× Uh, not always. If I see something beautiful or enjoyable I do, I take a photo of it because, uh, it's uh, really beautiful.

✓ Uh, not always. If I see something beautiful or interesting, I take a photo of it because it's really beautiful.

Redundant 'I do' is unnecessary and breaks the sentence flow; remove it. Also 'enjoyable' is less natural than 'interesting' in this context. Keep present simple 'if I see' and 'I take' for habitual actions. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I have never seen the sea when I traveled, so I think that I prefer mountains because I often see them.

✓ I have never seen the sea when I travel, so I think I prefer the mountains because I see them more often.

Mixed tenses: 'I have never seen the sea when I traveled' mixes present perfect with past. Use either past ('I never saw the sea when I traveled') or present simple/present perfect for general experience. Here, use present simple 'when I travel' for habitual trips and 'I have never seen the sea' if referring to lifetime experience. Also add 'the' before 'mountains' and rephrase 'often see them' to 'see them more often' for clarity.