旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations, and correct wrong word choices (e.g. 'mad' → 'happy' or 'excited'). Keep to under 4–5 short sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when travelling by bus or car because I find the scenery relaxing. For example, I enjoy watching animals by the roadside and the shapes of distant mountains, which always make the trip more interesting.

建議: Give a direct answer then one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Avoid unclear words ('extrapolately') and unnecessary repetition. Use correct tense (present simple) and simpler noun forms ('photos' not 'photo').

範例: Yes, I often take photos or short videos when I'm travelling because I like to capture interesting scenes. For instance, I might photograph animals by the road or people running on the beach to remember the moment.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words ('maybe', 'like', 'there have') and use natural phrases ('calming atmosphere', 'positive vibes'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer the sea because it gives me a calm atmosphere and helps me relax. For example, listening to waves and feeling the sea breeze always lifts my mood and reduces stress.

× Yes I do, because when I'm travelling by bus or car, the view from window is very very nice.

✓ Yes, I do, because when I'm travelling by bus or car, the view from the window is very, very nice.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'window'. Use 'the window' when referring to a specific window (the one of the bus or car). Also add commas for clarity and a comma between repeated 'very'. Suggestion: always include articles before singular countable nouns when they refer to a specific item.

× Like there have a something make me so mad.

✓ For example, there is something that makes me so mad.

Unclear structure and incorrect use of 'have'. Use 'there is' for existence (there be issue) and 'something that makes' to create a correct relative clause. Also use singular verb 'makes' to agree with singular 'something'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence and follow with a noun phrase and correct verb agreement.

× Maybe for example like uh, there have a animal in there or maybe some mountain.

✓ Maybe, for example, there is an animal in there or maybe some mountains.

Multiple problems: 'have' is incorrect for existence (use 'there is/are'); 'a animal' needs 'an' before a vowel sound; and 'mountain' should be plural or preceded by an article if singular. Also 'in there' is awkward but acceptable; better: 'inside' or 'in the area'. Suggestion: use 'there is' for singular and 'there are' for plural; use 'an' before vowel sounds; choose singular/plural consistently.

× Yes, I do. I do enjoy taking photo or video when I was traveling and extrapolately like taking photo of you and for animal and maybe some feel like a mountain or people when they're running or they do something, yes, maybe that's all.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos or videos when I am travelling, especially photos of animals, mountains, people running, or when people are doing something interesting.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('when I was traveling' should match present habitual 'I do enjoy' so use present continuous or simple present 'when I am travelling' or 'when I travel'); 'taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos' and 'video' -> 'videos'; 'extrapolately' is incorrect word choice — use 'especially' or 'particularly'; 'for animal' should be 'of animals'; awkward phrase 'some feel like a mountain' corrected to 'mountains'; fix clause 'people when they're running or they do something' to 'people running or when people are doing something'. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent, use plural forms for general activities, and choose appropriate linking words like 'especially'.

× Maybe I do prefer sea because every time I look for a sea, I think like there have a maybe calm energy for me and there's have so very positive vibes and yeah, maybe that's all.

✓ Maybe I prefer the sea because every time I look at the sea, I feel a calm energy and very positive vibes.

Problems: 'do prefer' is unnecessary emphasis—use simple present 'prefer'; 'look for a sea' is incorrect preposition—use 'look at the sea'; article needed before 'sea' ('the sea'); 'there have' is wrong — use neither 'there' nor 'have' here; 'I feel a calm energy' is natural; 'there's have so very positive vibes' incorrect—use 'very positive vibes' or 'it gives me very positive vibes'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('look at'), articles ('the sea'), and simple present for habitual preferences; avoid redundant words like 'maybe' repeatedly.