旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and use complete sentences with correct verb forms. Add a linking phrase when giving an example and be specific about what you find refreshing. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because the changing landscape relaxes me. For example, I enjoy watching green fields, rivers and small towns pass by, which helps me unwind. When I spot an interesting building, it makes the journey feel shorter.

建議: Correct grammar and sentence structure, remove fillers, and complete your thought. Use a topic sentence stating whether you take photos, then give a reason and a short result. Be specific about what you photograph and explain briefly how you feel when reviewing the photos.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car because it helps me preserve memories of pretty views and unusual scenes. For instance, I usually photograph sunsets, colourful fields or old buildings. Later, looking at these pictures makes me feel nostalgic and reminds me of the trip.

建議: Make your response grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a direct statement of preference, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, so, when). Avoid unclear phrases and unfinished sentences. Provide a concise personal detail that supports your preference.

範例: I prefer the sea because growing up far from the coast made visiting the beach feel like a special treat. For example, seeing shells and hearing the waves when I finally went to the sea was unforgettable, and I still enjoy the relaxed atmosphere and salty air.

× Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car, uh, because the changing landscape, trees, rivers and small towns uh, refreshed my mind.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car because the changing landscape, trees, rivers, and small towns refresh my mind.

The verb 'refreshed' is past tense while the rest of the sentence is present habitual, so an adverb/verb form issue causes inconsistency. Use present tense 'refresh' to match 'usually' and 'travel'. Also remove filler pauses and add commas for clarity; 'changing landscape' is a noun phrase so use plural verb 'refresh'. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent with habitual actions (use present simple).

× Especially when I see green fields or interesting buildings, uh, makes the journey more.

✓ Especially when I see green fields or interesting buildings, it makes the journey more enjoyable.

The clause lacks a subject for the verb 'makes', causing a sentence structure error. Add the dummy subject 'it' and complete the predicate with an adjective like 'enjoyable' to clarify meaning. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has an explicit subject and a complete predicate.

× Yet I always take photos of the scenery.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of the scenery.

'Yet' is used incorrectly at the start; it functions as a conjunction/adverb meaning 'but' or 'however', which doesn't fit here. This is a word-choice/modal-type issue affecting register. Replace with 'Yes' to answer the question directly. Suggestion: Use simple affirmatives like 'Yes' in responses to direct yes/no questions.

× It's a delightful thing for me to preserving memory when I see a pretty views and interesting scenes.

✓ It's a delightful thing for me to preserve memories when I see pretty views and interesting scenes.

After 'to' (infinitive marker) use the base form 'preserve', not the -ing form 'preserving'. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' to match 'views and scenes'. 'a pretty views' has article-noun number mismatch. Suggestion: Use infinitive 'to preserve' and match plural nouns appropriately.

× Uh, and I think when I, uh, check out my phone and I saw the picture, I.

✓ And I think when I check my phone and see the picture, I feel happy.

The sequence mixes present ('check') with past ('saw') and ends incomplete. Maintain present tense for habitual action: 'check' and 'see'. Add a suitable result clause 'I feel happy' to complete the sentence. Remove fillers. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and finish the thought with a clear main clause.

× To be honest, I prefer the sea.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the sea.

This sentence is correct in grammar and structure; no correction needed. Suggestion: None.

× When I was a child I lived far from away the sea shell.

✓ When I was a child I lived far away from the sea.

'Far from away' is redundant and incorrect word order. 'Sea shell' is wrong here; likely intended 'sea' or 'seashell' (an object). Use 'far away from the sea' or 'far from the sea'. The original mixes prepositions incorrectly. Suggestion: Use 'far away from' or 'far from' plus the correct noun 'the sea'.

× Seeing the sea become a dream for me and visiting the beach has always felt special to me.

✓ Seeing the sea became a dream for me, and visiting the beach has always felt special.

The first clause uses incorrect verb form 'become' with past context 'When I was a child'. Use past 'became'. The second clause is fine but repetitive 'to me' can be omitted for concision. Ensure tense consistency across clauses. Suggestion: Align verb tenses to the time frame being described.

× As I could get older, those treats become.

✓ As I got older, those dreams came true.

The clause 'As I could get older' mixes modal 'could' inappropriately; use past 'got older'. 'Those treats become' is incomplete and uses present tense 'become' incorrectly. Likely intended 'those dreams became' or 'those dreams came true'. Provide a complete predicate. Suggestion: Use clear past-tense phrasing 'As I got older' and complete the idea with a full verb phrase.