旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use, and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find the changing views relaxing. For example, on a recent trip I enjoyed watching farmland and small villages pass by, which helped me unwind after a busy week.

建議: Be more concise and correct collocations (e.g., “take photos of the scenery,” “at night,” “in rainy weather”). Give a specific reason and one brief example, using a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially at night or in rainy weather, because the lights and reflections create a unique atmosphere. For instance, last month I photographed city lights reflected on wet roads, and the pictures looked quite dramatic.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, such as) and specific vocabulary (beach, volleyball, fishing). Avoid vague phrases like “some others activities.”

範例: I prefer the sea because it offers many activities and a relaxing atmosphere. For example, I enjoy fishing and playing volleyball on the beach, and I also like walking along the shore while listening to the waves.

× Yes, I always look out the windows and the scenery when travel by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I always look out the windows and at the scenery when I travel by bus or car.

Missing subject 'I' before 'travel' and incorrect verb form. The sentence needs 'I travel' for correct present tense and personal subject. Also use preposition 'at' with 'the scenery'. Suggestion: include the subject and use 'travel' for habitual present: 'when I travel'.

× I always think I watch the scenery when I on a trip.

✓ I always think I watch the scenery when I am on a trip.

The clause 'when I on a trip' lacks the verb 'am'. Use the present continuous 'am' to form 'I am on a trip'. Alternatively, use simple present 'when I go on a trip'. Ensure complete clause with subject and verb.

× Always make me relaxed and pleasant.

✓ It always makes me feel relaxed and happy.

Sentence fragment missing subject and correct verb form. Use 'It' as subject referring to watching scenery and 'makes' for third person singular. Also use 'feel relaxed and happy' instead of 'pleasant' which describes things, not feelings. Use complete sentence structure.

× Yes, I always take the photos of the scenery outside of the car windows, especially in the rainy days and at the night.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially on rainy days and at night.

Do not use 'the' before 'photos' or 'scenery' in this general context. Use singular 'car window' to refer to the immediate window and remove 'of' after 'outside'. 'In the rainy days' and 'at the night' are incorrect prepositions: use 'on rainy days' and 'at night'. Also prefer plural 'days' without 'the' for general statements.

× I think the scenery and the atmosphere is very, very special and I really enjoy it.

✓ I think the scenery and the atmosphere are very, very special and I really enjoy them.

Compound subject 'the scenery and the atmosphere' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' and plural pronoun 'them' instead of singular 'it'. Match subject and verb number and pronoun referent.

× Oh exactly, I prefer the sea because I can do lots of activities in the sea such as go fishing and some others activities and I always like to see because there have some beaches and I can play the volleyball on it.

✓ Oh, exactly. I prefer the sea because I can do lots of activities there, such as go fishing and other activities. I also like it because there are some beaches where I can play volleyball.

Multiple issues: 'in the sea' is better as 'there' for activities on the coast; 'some others activities' is incorrect—use 'other activities'; 'I always like to see because there have some beaches' has incorrect verb and structure—use 'I also like it because there are some beaches'; 'play the volleyball on it' should be 'play volleyball there' without 'the' and with correct preposition. Break into clear sentences and use correct verbs and articles.