旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with grammar, word choice and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and word choices (e.g., 'especially', 'helps', 'spotting'). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and add one specific detail that supports your reason using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for example').

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel, especially in Japan, because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy spotting interesting buildings in Tokyo and watching the countryside change as we leave the city. I also like watching the sky at sunset because the colours are very peaceful.

建議: Improve accuracy and word choice, and avoid repetition. Use plural/singular correctly (e.g., 'take photos', 'share them with friends') and correct phrases ('cityscapes', 'dramatic light' rather than 'dramatic nights'). Add one concrete example linked with 'for instance' or 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window to preserve memories and share them with friends. For instance, I photograph cityscapes and the changing colours of the sky at sunset because the light creates a strong atmosphere in my pictures.

建議: Make a clear topic sentence and fix grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Avoid awkward phrasing and keep to 2–3 sentences. Provide a specific activity or example to support your preference.

範例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I feel uncomfortable in water and I can't swim. Therefore, I enjoy hiking and spending time at higher altitudes, for example exploring mountain trails and enjoying panoramic views.

× Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel, specially in Japan because it's help me relax and enjoy watching the cityscape and the passing countryside.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel, especially in Japan because it helps me relax and enjoy watching the cityscape and the passing countryside.

Errors: 'specially' should be 'especially' (word choice) and 'it's help' is incorrect verb form and pronoun contraction. 'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has', but the correct subject is 'it' with verb 'helps' (third person singular). Suggestion: use 'especially' and the third-person singular verb 'helps' without contraction confusion.

× I also like sporting interesting buildings or the changing colour of the sky at sunset.

✓ I also like spotting interesting buildings or the changing colour of the sky at sunset.

Error: 'sporting' is the wrong word; the intended verb is 'spotting' (to notice). This is a word choice error (incorrect gerund). Suggestion: use 'spotting' to mean noticing things while travelling.

× I often take photo from the car window to preserve memories of trips and to share the best shop with friends.

✓ I often take photos from the car window to preserve memories of trips and to share the best shots with friends.

Errors: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to agree with 'often' and general activity. 'the best shop' is incorrect word choice; likely 'shots' (photos). Suggestion: use plural 'photos' and correct noun 'shots' when referring to photographs.

× I especially like capturing cityscape and the changing colours of the sky at sunset because they create dramatic nights and a strong sense of atmosphere.

✓ I especially like capturing cityscapes and the changing colours of the sky at sunset because they create dramatic scenes and a strong sense of atmosphere.

Errors: 'cityscape' should be plural 'cityscapes' to match general activity or use 'the cityscape' singular; 'create dramatic nights' is unnatural—'dramatic scenes' fits meaning. Suggestion: use plural or add article, and replace 'nights' with 'scenes' to describe visual drama.

× I prefer the mountains to the sea but are beautiful, but I am not comfortable in water since I can't swim, so I like hiking and spend time at higher altitudes instead.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because they are beautiful, but I am not comfortable in the water since I can't swim, so I like hiking and spending time at higher altitudes instead.

Multiple errors: missing subject 'they' in 'are beautiful' (sentence structure/subject-verb agreement); 'in water' needs article 'in the water' or 'in water' is less natural; parallelism error 'like hiking and spend' should be 'like hiking and spending'. Suggestion: add 'because they are', use 'the water', and keep verb forms parallel by using gerund 'spending'.