旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), fix tense and article mistakes, and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. For example, say why you enjoy it and give a specific detail about what you notice.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like seeing small villages and farmland pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

建議: Give a direct short answer, correct grammar and use linking words to connect reason and example. Replace informal contractions and correct verb forms (e.g., 'become' -> 'are'). Add a brief example or result to make it specific.

範例: No, I usually don't, because pictures taken from a moving vehicle are often blurred. Instead, I prefer to stop and take photos when the view is clear; this way the images are much sharper and more detailed.

建議: Structure the answer: give a direct preference or say you like both, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Remove repetition and fix grammar (e.g., 'a sea' -> 'the sea', 'I I have it's my favorite hobby'). Keep to 2–4 sentences and include a clear example or comparison.

範例: I find it hard to choose because I enjoy both, but I prefer the mountains overall. I grew up surrounded by high peaks, so I love hiking and the quieter atmosphere; however, I also enjoy the sea for swimming during the summer.

× I it's my favorite things while traveling by car or bus.

✓ It's one of my favorite things when traveling by car or bus.

The original sentence has extra pronoun 'I' and plural 'things' causing awkward structure. Use a clear subject 'It' and singular 'one of my favorite things' to match context. Suggestion: remove the redundant 'I' and use 'one of' to express preference.

× I like look at the countries through the windows.

✓ I like looking at the countryside through the window.

After 'like' use the gerund form 'looking' rather than base verb 'look'. Also 'countries' is odd here; 'countryside' or 'scenery' is more natural, and 'window' (singular) matches 'car or bus' context. Suggestion: use 'like + -ing' and choose appropriate noun.

× No, I'm not 'cause photos usually blurred and that's why I prefer to stop the car and then take photos.

✓ No, I don't, because photos are usually blurred, and that's why I prefer to stop the car and then take photos.

'I'm not' is incorrect for refusing; use 'I don't' for habitual actions. 'Photos usually blurred' lacks auxiliary verb; use passive 'are usually blurred'. Maintain logical connectors: 'because' and 'and'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary verbs and passive when describing states.

× I think photos became better.

✓ I think the photos turn out better.

'Became' (simple past) is inappropriate for a general present opinion. Use present tense expression 'turn out better' or 'are better' to indicate usual result. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and choose idiomatic verb 'turn out'.

× It's a difficult question for me because I love mountains a lot.

✓ It's a difficult question for me because I love the mountains a lot.

Add the definite article 'the' before plural 'mountains' when referring to mountains in general or a specific range where the speaker grew up. Suggestion: include 'the' when talking about a known group or landscape.

× I grew up between huge mountains, but I like a sea too because I love swimming a lot.

✓ I grew up among huge mountains, but I like the sea too because I love swimming a lot.

Use 'among' (or 'in') rather than 'between' for more than two mountains. Also 'the sea' is more natural than 'a sea' when referring to the seaside in general. Suggestion: choose correct preposition for multiple items and use 'the' for general geographical features.

× For example, I I have it's my favorite hobby.

✓ For example, swimming is my favorite hobby.

The original contains repeated pronoun 'I I' and an ill-formed clause 'have it's my favorite hobby'. Simplify to subject 'swimming' and predicate 'is my favorite hobby'. Use gerund to name the hobby. Suggestion: avoid repetitions and use clear subject-verb structure.