旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えは簡潔ですが、文法と語順の誤りが多く、曖昧な表現（“it it I looked”）が理解を妨げます。改善点： 1) 主語と時制を正しくする（現在習慣については現在形を使う）。 2) 文を短くし、トピック文→詳細の構成にする。接続詞（because, so, when）を使って論理を明確にする。 3) 語彙はシンプルで正確に。不要な単語を削る。 具体例：現在の習慣を表す“I always”を先頭に置き、理由をbecauseでつなぐ。

範例: I always look out of the window when I travel by car or bus, unless I am very tired. I enjoy watching the passing scenery because it helps me relax and notice interesting places.

建議: 回答は肯定で始まり良いですが、語彙の誤用（"touching spells"）や文法エラー（"it is also fascinated"）が目立ちます。改善点： 1) 正しい語句（e.g. "beautiful scenes" / "breathtaking views"）を使う。 2) 主語と動詞の一致を直す（I am/it is/I find）。 3) 補足情報は一つか二つに絞り、接続詞（when, because）でつなぐ。

範例: Yes, definitely. I often take photos of mountains, ocean views and interesting cloud formations when they look especially beautiful, because I like to keep memories of those moments.

建議: 内容は良いですが、文法と表現の誤りが多く、文が途切れています。改善点： 1) 完全なトピック文を作る（"I like both"）。 2) 理由を明確にし、過去の状況を表す場合は過去形を正しく使う（I grew up）。 3) 冗長な語や誤植を避け、接続語（because, so, and）で文をつなぐ。

範例: I like both the mountains and the sea. I grew up by the coast, so I am comfortable with the sea, but my family often went hiking in the mountains, so I enjoy them too.

× Yes, always I did unless I feel sleeping.

✓ Yes, I always do unless I feel sleepy.

The original mixes past and present tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Always I did' should be 'I always do' to match the present habitual action. 'Feel sleeping' is ungrammatical; use the adjective 'sleepy' after 'feel'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and pair 'feel' with adjectives (e.g., 'feel sleepy').

× When I usually ride on cars I find the scenery beautiful and it it I looked.

✓ When I usually ride in cars, I find the scenery beautiful and I look at it.

Errors include incorrect preposition 'ride on cars' (use 'ride in cars'), unnecessary repetition 'it it', and incorrect past tense 'I looked' when referring to a habitual present action. Use present simple 'I look at it' for habitual actions and correct preposition 'in'.

× Yes, definitely. When I come across the touching spells such as mountains, ocean views and the clouds, it is also fascinated by the beauty.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I come across touching sights such as mountains, ocean views, and clouds, I am also fascinated by their beauty.

Problems: 'touching spells' is incorrect word choice; 'sights' is appropriate. 'The clouds' can be 'clouds'. 'It is also fascinated by the beauty' incorrectly uses 'it' and passive structure; the speaker should be the subject: 'I am fascinated by their beauty'. Use present simple and correct noun choices and pronouns.

× I prefer both of them because.

✓ I prefer both of them because I enjoy both mountains and the sea.

The sentence is incomplete: 'because' requires a clause explaining the reason. Add a reason clause to complete the sentence. Ensure subject and verb are present.

× When I I was grown grill grown up by the sea and my family always went to hiking on mountain.

✓ I grew up by the sea, and my family always went hiking in the mountains.

Multiple issues: duplicated 'I I', incorrect phrase 'was grown' — use simple past 'I grew up'. 'Grill' is stray text and should be removed. 'Went to hiking on mountain' is ungrammatical; use 'went hiking in the mountains'. Use past tense for past situations and correct prepositions ('in the mountains').