旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and shows personal feeling, but language has small grammar issues and a slightly long sentence. Keep answers within 3–4 concise sentences, use a clear topic sentence, and link supporting detail with a simple connector. Focus on correct relative clauses (e.g. avoid "which" after a full clause) and natural phrasing.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the scenery from the window because it changes all the time and helps me relax. For example, I like seeing different neighborhoods and landscapes pass by, which makes long journeys more pleasant.

建議: Good direct response and clear reason. Improve by splitting into two shorter sentences and using smoother linking words (e.g. "because", "so"). Avoid repetition ("enjoy the view" twice) and choose natural collocations ("stay present" or "be in the moment").

範例: No, I usually don't take photos because I prefer to be in the moment and really notice the scenery. For example, staying present helps me appreciate small details like light on the buildings or birds flying by.

建議: Answer addresses preference with two reasons, but contains several grammar mistakes and unnatural phrasing. Correct basic errors ("see" → "the sea", "insect" → "insects", "which is many" → "which are common"), use linking words ("first", "second") properly, and keep sentences concise. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by two brief supporting reasons.

範例: I prefer the sea. First, there are usually fewer insects at the beach than in the mountains. Second, I love the sound of the waves because it helps me relax and fall asleep.

× Yes I do. I enjoy watching the scenery outside the window when traveling by bus or car because the scenery is different at every second and which can calm my mind.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the scenery outside the window when traveling by bus or car because the scenery changes every second and can calm my mind.

The original has an incorrect relative clause 'and which can calm my mind' and awkward phrase 'different at every second'. Replace with 'changes every second' for natural wording and remove 'which' after 'and' because it incorrectly links the clause. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for standard punctuation. Suggestion: say 'the scenery changes every second and can calm my mind.' (Grammar Problem Type IDs matched: 26 Sentence structure errors and 26 covers relative clause misuse.)

× Actually I don't take photos because I think only when I concentrate or focus on the moment I can enjoy the view the most and that's why I don't take photos, I just use my eyes to enjoy the view.

✓ Actually, I don't take photos because I think that when I concentrate on the moment I can enjoy the view the most; that's why I just use my eyes to enjoy it.

Run-on sentence and missing conjunction 'that' make the sentence unclear. Use a semicolon or split into two sentences to avoid comma splice. 'Concentrate or focus on the moment' is redundant; choose one verb ('concentrate on the moment'). Replace repeated 'take photos' with pronoun use and 'enjoy it' to avoid repetition. Add comma after 'Actually'. This corrects sentence structure (ID 26) and improves clarity.

× I prefer to see because first I don't like insect which is many in the mountains and the second I love the sound of waves which can help me go into the sleep.

✓ I prefer the sea because, firstly, I don't like insects, which are common in the mountains, and secondly, I love the sound of waves, which helps me fall asleep.

Multiple problems: 'prefer to see' is wrong — say 'prefer the sea'; 'insect which is many' has noun number and verb agreement issues — use plural 'insects' and 'which are common' (subject-verb agreement, ID 1 and 27). 'Which can help me go into the sleep' is unidiomatic; use 'helps me fall asleep' (idiomatic verb phrase and subject-verb agreement). Add commas and ordinal connectors 'firstly'/'secondly' for clarity. These corrections address singular/plural (ID 1), subject-verb agreement (ID 27), article/phrase errors (ID 22), and sentence structure (ID 26).