旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và cấu trúc rối; dùng liên từ để nối ý. Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng câu trực tiếp (Yes, I usually look out...), sau đó giải thích lý do hoặc mô tả cảnh bạn thấy (landsape, people, buildings).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy seeing the landscape and people’s daily activities. For example, I often notice small shops, children playing, and farmers working in the fields, which makes the journey more interesting.

建議: Cần nói mạch lạc và sử dụng danh từ số nhiều/đơn đúng, đồng thời cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối. Tránh tiếng lắp và từ không cần thiết. Nên dùng 2–3 câu: câu chủ đề + 1 câu mở rộng với ví dụ cụ thể.

範例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window, especially when I see interesting scenes. For instance, I might photograph people working in markets, colourful buses and bicycles, or fields full of flowers that catch my eye.

建議: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thì, chia động từ, sở hữu), và đưa lý do cụ thể, có liên kết logic. Nên dùng 2–3 câu: nói rõ sở thích, rồi nêu lý do với ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn thích làm ở biển.

範例: I prefer the sea because I love coastal wildlife and the relaxed atmosphere. For example, I enjoy photographing beaches and watching fishermen and families by the shore, which shows me how people live in coastal communities.

× Yes, eyes often look out the windows at the sceneries when traveling by bus.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the windows at the scenery when traveling by bus.

The speaker omitted the subject pronoun 'I' and used 'eyes' incorrectly; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun so singular form is used. Also use 'look out of' or 'look out' and 'often' should be next to the verb for natural word order.

× Oh, I can't see all the beautiful sceneries about peoples the.

✓ Oh, I can't see all the beautiful scenery or all the people.

'Scenery' is uncountable, so 'sceneries' is incorrect; 'peoples' is plural of 'people' used for ethnic groups, not individual persons. The original word order 'about peoples the' is ungrammatical. Split into two clear options: 'scenery' or 'people'.

× Oh yes, I usually take photos of the sceneries outside the car's window.

✓ Oh yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) not 'sceneries'. 'Outside the car window' is the natural prepositional phrase; 'car's window' is grammatical but less natural here.

× Oh, such as, uh. The activities of peoples or is the transportation, is goings are the flowers.

✓ Oh, such as the activities of people, the transportation, or the flowers I see outside.

'Peoples' is incorrect for ordinary people; use 'people'. The original has extraneous verbs 'is' and 'are' and wrong word order. Reorder into a clear list and use parallel nouns.

× I prefer the seas because is have a whale's environment and I can't goes to takes a photos the beach and the peoples in theirs and how do they live.

✓ I prefer the sea because it has a whale-friendly environment, and I can take photos of the beach and the people there and see how they live.

Many errors: 'seas' vs 'sea'—use singular 'the sea' for the general preference. 'Is have' is ungrammatical; use 'it has'. 'I can't goes to takes a photos' has wrong modal/verb forms—should be 'I can take photos' or 'I can go and take photos'. 'peoples' should be 'people' and 'in theirs' should be 'there'. Also word order and verb forms fixed for clarity.