旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct the minor grammar errors, be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail. Replace 'guess out' with 'look out' and use consistent tense (present simple). Add a linking word if you include an extra detail.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because watching the passing landscape relaxes me. For example, seeing trees and rivers helps me unwind after a long day.

建議: Use a full grammatical sentence for the main answer and correct prepositions and articles. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word to add a specific detail or example. Change 'on the scenery' to 'of the scenery' and 'sparks in ideas' to 'sparks ideas'.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window. For instance, on long journeys I photograph changing scenes such as fields and city streets because they remind me of places I visited and spark new ideas.

建議: Ensure consistent tense and correct small mistakes. Use present simple for preferences ('find' not 'found') and correct awkward phrases ('helps me unwind' instead of 'helps me on wind'). Provide one clear supporting reason with a specific example and a linking phrase.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I find the fresh air and peaceful scenery very relaxing. For example, hiking on forest trails helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I often guess out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I found watching passing landscapes relaxing and a good way to unwind.

✓ Yes, I often gaze out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I find watching passing landscapes relaxing and a good way to unwind.

The verb 'guess out of the window' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb is 'gaze out' meaning look steadily. Also tense consistency: the student uses present habit 'I often' so 'found' should be present 'find'. Use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'gaze' for looking at scenery and keep present tense 'find'.

× Yes, taking photos on the scenery outside the car window.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

The original is a fragment lacking a finite verb and has wrong preposition 'on'. Change to a full sentence with subject and present simple verb 'I take photos' to match habit. Use preposition 'of' for photographing something, not 'on'.

× On the long journeys I enjoy observing changing scenery like fields or city streets, which helps me feel connected to the place and often sparks in ideas or memories.

✓ On long journeys I enjoy observing changing scenery like fields or city streets, which helps me feel connected to the place and often sparks ideas or memories.

Remove the article 'the' before 'long journeys' for general statement and delete incorrect preposition 'in' after 'sparks'. 'Spark' takes a direct object (ideas), so use 'sparks ideas or memories'. Tense and agreement are fine; just fix article and preposition errors.

× I prefer the mountains because I found the fresh air and peaceful scenery much more relaxing.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I find the fresh air and peaceful scenery much more relaxing.

Main clause 'I prefer' is present; subordinate clause should also use present simple 'find' for general truth. 'Found' is past tense and creates tense inconsistency. Use present 'find' to match preference and habitual state.

× For instance, hiking in forest trails helps me on wind after a busy week.

✓ For instance, hiking on forest trails helps me unwind after a busy week.

The preposition for trails is 'on' or better 'on forest trails'; 'helps me on wind' is incorrect—likely intended 'helps me unwind'. Replace with verb 'unwind' meaning relax. Also keep present simple 'helps' for habitual effect.