旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and relevant to the question. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers whether you look out the window, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated specifics (e.g. naming a road) unless they add meaning. Use correct verb forms and natural phrasing.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car. I enjoy watching the changing neighbourhoods and landmarks, and sometimes I spot interesting buildings or parks that give me a sense of the place.

建議: Answer the question directly and use natural tense and phrasing. Say whether you usually do this, then give a specific condition or frequency and a brief reason. Correct minor grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid exaggerated words unless clarified.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car when the view is particularly beautiful. For example, I stopped once to capture a sunset over a river and later shared the picture on my social media to show friends the view.

建議: Give a direct answer first, then add two specific supporting reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Keep it concise and natural. Mention concrete details to make your preference convincing.

範例: I prefer the mountains at the moment because I love the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. Also, I enjoy hiking and the dramatic landscapes, which help me relax and feel refreshed.

× When I mentioned traveling, I usually think that it will be by car that I will be driving on the Beach Rd. inside the USA.

✓ When I think about traveling, I usually imagine driving by car on Beach Rd in the USA.

The original mixes past ('mentioned') with habitual present ('usually think') causing tense inconsistency. Use present simple 'think' or 'think about' for habitual actions. 'Imagine' fits better than the awkward cleft 'it will be by car that I will be driving'. 'Beach Rd' does not need 'the' and 'in the USA' is more natural than 'inside the USA'. Improve by keeping present tense for habits and simplifying sentence structure.

× If I find the scenery breathtaking, I will take photo and post in my social media for my followers who need to see this masterpiece.

✓ If I find the scenery breathtaking, I will take a photo and post it on my social media for my followers who would like to see it.

'Photo' needs an article ('a photo') because it is a countable noun. 'Post in my social media' is incorrect preposition and article usage; use 'post it on my social media'. Also 'who need to see this masterpiece' is exaggerated and slightly awkward; 'would like to see it' is more natural. Ensure pronoun 'it' refers back to 'photo' for clarity.

× For me, it's hard to choose the one, but in this moment I would like to be in the mountains because I love this fresh air and the landscape.

✓ For me, it's hard to choose, but at the moment I would like to be in the mountains because I love the fresh air and the landscape.

'Choose the one' is unnatural; say 'choose'. Replace 'in this moment' with the correct time expression 'at the moment'. Use 'the fresh air' rather than 'this fresh air' for natural noun phrase usage. Tense 'would like' is acceptable to express a desire; keep it. Overall, adjust articles and prepositional phrase for natural English.