旅行— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
考生
Yes I usually looking outside the window when I was travel because I sometimes feel get sick car sick and looking outside helps me better my nausea.
考官
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
考生
Yes, I usually do. I want to capture the beautiful views in my cell phone, so I take a picture and then later I see the pictures.
考官
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
考生
I prefer the sea. The ocean makes me feel refreshed. When I see the ocean I feel fresh, calm, relaxed and the breath makes me more happy.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
分數: 62.0建議: 문법과 시제 사용을 바로 잡고, 더 자연스럽고 간결한 표현을 사용하세요. 현재 습관을 말할 때는 현재형을 사용하고, 이유는 간단히 연결어(so, because)를 통해 명확히 설명하세요. 또한 불필요한 중복(예: "feel get sick car sick")을 제거하세요.
範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because I sometimes get car sick, so looking outside helps ease my nausea.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
分數: 74.0建議: 문장을 더 자연스럽고 구체적으로 만드세요. 'cell phone' 대신 'my phone'을 쓰고, 사진을 찍는 이유와 사진을 보는 시점을 연결해 더 풍부한 세부사항을 제공하세요. 문장 길이는 2~3문장 안으로 유지하세요.
範例: Yes, I often do. I like to capture beautiful views on my phone so I can look back at the photos later and remember the trip.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
分數: 68.0建議: 의견을 제시한 후 구체적인 이유를 한두 가지로 정리하고, 중복되는 표현을 줄이세요. 감정을 설명할 때는 자연스러운 표현(eg. 'it calms me' 'I feel refreshed')을 사용하고 문장 연결어(For example, because)를 활용하세요.
範例: I prefer the sea because it calms me and makes me feel refreshed. For example, the sound of the waves and the fresh sea air help me relax and lift my mood.
文法
× Yes I usually looking outside the window when I was travel because I sometimes feel get sick car sick and looking outside helps me better my nausea.
✓ Yes, I usually look outside the window when I travel because I sometimes get car sick, and looking outside helps my nausea.
Multiple errors: 'usually looking' should be 'usually look' (use base verb with adverb of frequency) — Category 8. 'when I was travel' is incorrect tense/auxiliary; use simple present 'when I travel' to match habitual action — Category 6. 'feel get sick car sick' is ungrammatical; use 'get car sick' or 'feel car sick' — Category 26 (sentence structure) and 13 (word choice). 'helps me better my nausea' should be 'helps my nausea' or 'relieves my nausea' (incorrect verb and object order) — Category 13. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, place adverbs before main verb, and use correct verb phrases like 'get car sick' and 'relieve nausea'.
× Yes, I usually do. I want to capture the beautiful views in my cell phone, so I take a picture and then later I see the pictures.
✓ Yes, I usually do. I want to capture the beautiful views on my cell phone, so I take pictures and later look at them.
Preposition error: 'in my cell phone' should be 'on my cell phone' when referring to images stored/displayed — Category 11. 'take a picture and then later I see the pictures' is repetitive and awkward; use plural 'take pictures' for habitual action and 'look at them' to refer back — Category 1 (singular/plural) and 26 (sentence structure). Also 'see the pictures' is acceptable but 'look at them' is more natural. Use consistent habitual simple present tense.
× I prefer the sea. The ocean makes me feel refreshed. When I see the ocean I feel fresh, calm, relaxed and the breath makes me more happy.
✓ I prefer the sea. The ocean makes me feel refreshed. When I see the ocean, I feel fresh, calm and relaxed, and the breeze makes me happier.
'the breath' is incorrect; the correct word is 'breeze' for the wind near the sea — Category 13 (word choice). 'more happy' is non-idiomatic; use comparative 'happier' — Category 25 (comparative) and 13. Also add commas for clarity and natural conjunction 'calm and relaxed' (remove extra comma). Use consistent adjective forms.
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