旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and direct, but it is too short and lacks supporting detail. To improve, extend with one or two brief, relevant details (reason or typical observation) using a linking phrase. Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I do. I often look out because I find the passing scenery relaxing, and I like noticing small changes in towns or countryside while I travel.

建議: Your answer communicates the idea but has repetition, hesitations and grammar errors. To improve, remove redundancy (don’t repeat “outside” or “I do”), use clear sentence structure, and add a linking word to connect reason and example. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences with specific detail.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the window because I enjoy the views while travelling. For example, I like capturing the patterns of trees and the changing light over fields when the bus moves past them.

建議: Your answer gives a clear preference but is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. To improve, state your choice in a topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with clear linking words and correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like “how they produce different.”

範例: I prefer the mountains because they offer varied scenery and peaceful walks. For instance, I enjoy counting different types of trees and watching how the landscape changes as I travel through hills.

× Yes I do take photos outside the scenery outside the window because the view when I'm traveling I do enjoy they are nice and umm how the trees they pass I usually enjoy it very and even the wave of the bus I enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I enjoy the view when I'm traveling. The trees as they pass are nice, and I also enjoy the movement of the bus.

Multiple issues: redundant 'do' is unnecessary for simple present declarative sentences and awkward phrasing causes unclear meaning; gerund/participle forms and clause connections are misused. Use simple present 'I take' to state a habit. Replace 'outside the scenery outside the window' with 'of the scenery outside the window' to use correct preposition 'of' and remove repetition (preposition error relates to Incorrect use of prepositions but primary fix uses correct verb form and structure). Break long run-on sentence into shorter clear sentences and use relative/clause structures ('The trees as they pass') and noun phrases ('movement of the bus') to convey meaning clearly. Suggestions: avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in affirmative statements, use 'of' with 'photos', keep sentences concise and use correct noun phrases.

× When I'm traveling I prefer the mountain to seas because the mountain of different trees different looks and when I'm going I like counting the mountain and counting the trees and also looking how they produce different.

✓ When I'm traveling I prefer the mountains to the sea because the mountains have different trees and different appearances. When I travel I like counting the mountains and the trees and noticing how they differ.

Errors include singular/plural misuse and incorrect comparison construction. Use plural 'mountains' and singular 'the sea' with the preposition 'to' for preference comparisons. Use 'have' instead of 'of' to describe possession/characteristics and 'appearances' for clarity. 'When I'm going' is vague—use 'when I travel'. 'Looking how they produce different' is ungrammatical; use 'noticing how they differ' to express observing differences. Suggestions: match singular/plural nouns correctly, use standard comparative phrasing 'prefer X to Y', and choose clear verbs like 'have' and 'notice'.

× how the trees they pass I usually enjoy it very

✓ I usually enjoy the trees as they pass.

Redundant subject 'they' with 'the trees' creates an incorrect sentence structure and 'enjoy it very' is ungrammatical adverb use. Use a single subject and verb agreement 'trees ... pass' and place adverb properly if needed ('enjoy it very much'). Suggestions: avoid repeating subjects, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use adverbs in standard forms ('very much').

× When I'm traveling I prefer the mountain to seas

✓ When I'm traveling I prefer the mountains to the sea.

Incorrect article and pluralization: 'the mountain' should be plural 'mountains' if speaking generally, and 'seas' is less natural in this contrast—use singular 'the sea'. Use definite article 'the' with both nouns in this comparative structure to indicate specific categories. Suggestion: use 'the mountains' and 'the sea' for a natural comparison.