旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., 'during travel' or 'when travelling'), and explain the reason with a short, specific detail. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I enjoy observing new places. For example, I like watching city streets and countryside views, which helps me relax and feel less anxious during long journeys.

建議: Give a direct answer, avoid wordy phrases and grammatical errors, and provide a specific example of what you photograph and why. Use a linking word to connect your reason.

範例: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery while travelling because I like to preserve memories. For instance, I often photograph interesting buildings and colorful landscapes so I can look back at them later or share them with friends.

建議: Answer directly and confidently without filler words. State your preference, give a clear reason, and add a specific activity you enjoy there. Correct minor grammar (e.g., 'hiking' not 'hikings') and use one linking word to connect reason and example.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I feel uncomfortable around large bodies of water. Therefore, I enjoy hiking, camping and exploring mountain trails with my family, which gives me a sense of peace and adventure.

× Yes, sometimes I look outside from the window during the traveling because I really love to look look around as well as sometimes I suffer from a different kind of not a good feelings, so that's why I normally used to look outside.

✓ Yes, sometimes I look out of the window while travelling because I really love to look around, and sometimes I have bad feelings, so I usually look outside.

Errors include incorrect use of 'from the window' (preposition and phrase), duplicate word 'look', incorrect noun phrase 'a different kind of not a good feelings', and wrong verb phrase 'used to look' for habitual present. Use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window', 'while travelling' for ongoing action during travel, 'look around' as correct verb + -ing not needed here, 'have bad feelings' for a natural collocation, and 'usually' for present habit. Suggestions: remove repetitions, use correct prepositions (out of/ out), choose natural collocations ('have bad feelings'), and use simple present for habitual actions.

× Yes, I normally take photos of the scenery while traveling because I am that kind of person who loves to keep the memory of a beautiful things as well as a beautiful streets and everything as a part of my memory as a good one.

✓ Yes, I normally take photos of the scenery while travelling because I am the kind of person who loves to keep the memory of beautiful things, such as beautiful streets, as part of my good memories.

Errors include article misuse ('a beautiful things' should be 'beautiful things' or 'a beautiful thing'), unnecessary article before plural 'streets', awkward phrasing 'as a part of my memory as a good one'. Corrections: use 'the kind of person' to specify, drop 'a' with plural 'things', use 'such as' to give examples, and 'as part of my good memories' for natural expression. Suggestions: match articles to singular/plural nouns, simplify clauses, and use natural collocations ('good memories').

× Well, uh, honestly, I'm really a mountain person because uh, I have a little bit fear of water. So I normally prefer going to the mountains and love to do hikings, traveling, camping with my loved ones.

✓ Well, honestly, I'm really a mountain person because I have a bit of a fear of water. So I normally prefer going to the mountains and I love hiking, travelling, and camping with my loved ones.

Errors include missing article in 'a little bit fear of water' (should be 'a bit of a fear' or 'a little fear'), incorrect gerund plural 'hikings' (use uncountable 'hiking'), and parallel structure issues in the list. Use simple present 'I love hiking' for habitual preference and ensure consistent gerund forms. Suggestions: use 'a bit of a fear' or 'a little fear', use uncountable nouns for activities (hiking, travelling, camping), and keep parallel structure in lists with commas and 'and'.