旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms, clearer nouns, and a concise structure. Begin with a topic sentence stating whether you look out, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, why it calms you and a brief example). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the countryside. For example, seeing trees and fields helps me relax after a busy day, and I often notice small details like farm animals or narrow country lanes. As a result, it makes the journey feel peaceful and refreshing.

建議: Correct tense and sentence structure and be more specific: state frequency, reason, and one brief example. Use linking words (for example, so, because, when) to connect ideas. Keep it concise and natural (2–3 sentences).

範例: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture interesting views. For instance, when I see a beautiful sunrise or a mountain range, I take a quick picture with my phone to remember the moment.

建議: Avoid repetition and give a short reason for each preference using linking words (for example, because, while, and). State a clear topic sentence and then one contrasting detail for each option. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I would say both, because I enjoy mountains for hiking and fresh air, while I like the seaside for relaxing on the beach and listening to the waves. Therefore, I choose both depending on whether I want activity or rest.

× Whenever I travelling by bus, I look out through the window and I feel scenario, I feel nature, I feel with her.

✓ Whenever I am travelling by bus, I look out through the window and I feel the scenery, I feel nature, I feel close to it.

The original sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'am' before the present participle 'travelling'; English requires a form of 'be' with the present participle for continuous tenses (Grammar Problem Type 10). 'Scenario' is incorrect word choice; the correct noun is 'scenery'. 'Feel with her' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'feel close to it' to refer to nature. Suggestion: use 'I am travelling' for present continuous and choose correct nouns and pronouns to match the intended meaning.

× It's make me feel, it's make me calm and relax.

✓ It makes me feel calm and relaxed.

The subject 'it' requires the third person singular verb form 'makes' not 'make' (Grammar Problem Type 27). Also, 'feel calm and relax' mixes an adjective and a verb; use the adjective 'relaxed' after 'feel' to describe the state. Suggestion: use 'It makes me feel calm and relaxed.'

× It's a really good experience for me.

✓ It is a really good experience for me.

This sentence is acceptable but contracting 'It's' is less formal; for clarity in tests either form is fine. The correction expands the contraction to standard form. Grammar Problem Type 26 applies when minor style/structure clarity is needed. Suggestion: use full form 'It is' in formal contexts.

× Sometime I took the photos which I think that it's a very nice to capture so the time I use my phone and take photos of scenery.

✓ Sometimes I take photos that I think are nice to capture, so I use my phone to take pictures of the scenery.

Multiple tense and word-choice issues: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb of frequency). The original mixes past 'took' with present thoughts; maintain present simple 'take' for habitual actions (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'Which I think that it's a very nice to capture' is ungrammatical; use 'that I think are nice to capture' and ensure subject-verb agreement. 'So the time I use my phone' is awkward; use 'so I use my phone'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for habitual actions and simplify clause structure.

× I would say both because I really like like mountains all.

✓ I would say both because I really like mountains.

The phrase 'like like' is a repetition error; remove the duplicate. 'Mountains all' is incorrect; unnecessary quantifier 'all' should be omitted (Grammar Problem Type 14). Suggestion: say 'I really like mountains' or 'I like all kinds of mountains' if you mean variety.

× Also I really like seasides.

✓ I also really like the seaside.

'Seasides' is an uncommon plural; 'the seaside' or 'seaside areas' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type 13). Add 'the' to refer to the coastal environment generally. Suggestion: use 'I also really like the seaside' or 'I also really like seaside areas.'

× So I would say both in this case.

✓ So I would say both in this case.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. Included here for completeness and to show it fits the context (Grammar Problem Type 26).