旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (e.g., “uh”, “I I”).

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. Because I love nature, I often enjoy watching trees, fields and mountains pass by; it makes the journey feel fresh and relaxing.

建議: Make a direct statement about whether you take photos, then give a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct verb forms and avoid contradictory or unclear phrases like “taking a picture of nature is wrong.”

範例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because natural scenes give me positive feelings. For example, last month I photographed a bright sunset behind the hills, and I keep those photos to remember the view.

建議: Answer directly which you prefer and give one or two clear reasons with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Use smoother phrasing and correct comparative forms (e.g., “more refreshing than the sea”). Avoid hesitations like “uh” and repeated words.

範例: I prefer the mountains because they help me feel connected to nature and offer fresh, clean air. For instance, staying at a hill station lets me hike and enjoy peaceful views, which I find more relaxing than a busy beach.

× Yes, I look out into out the window when I was driving, when I traveling by bus or car, because I Li I like nature, nature beauty.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window when I am travelling by bus or car because I like nature and its beauty.

Errors: incorrect present participle and continuous form ('when I traveling' should be 'when I am travelling'), extra words ('into out', 'Li I'), and awkward noun phrase ('nature beauty'). Reason: Use the present continuous 'am travelling' for actions happening in general while travelling; use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'; combine nouns with a possessive or 'its' to form 'its beauty'. Suggestion: Use 'I am travelling' for ongoing action and remove duplicated/mistyped words.

× So most of the time I look outside the window from bus and car and it feels new.

✓ Most of the time I look out of the window from the bus or car and it feels refreshing.

Errors: tense/detail and article use. 'So' unnecessary; 'from bus and car' should use articles 'the bus or car'; 'feels new' is unnatural — use 'feels refreshing' or 'feels new to me'. Reason: Use articles before singular nouns and choose a natural adjective. Suggestion: Use 'the bus or car' and a more appropriate adjective like 'refreshing'.

× It feels very fresh and.

✓ It feels very fresh.

Error: sentence fragment ending with 'and' creates incomplete structure. Reason: An 'and' must connect two parallel elements; here nothing follows. Suggestion: Remove 'and' or add the second element (for example, 'and relaxing').

× Yes, I took many photos from for from outside the window and it gives me face, uh, of good vibes and I, I feel that, uh, taking a picture of nature is wrong and it and I can see some nature in my, uh, in future also.

✓ Yes, I have taken many photos from outside the window and it gives me good vibes. I feel that taking pictures of nature is right and I hope to see more of it in the future.

Errors: tense inconsistency and odd word choices. 'Took' is simple past but the experience continues—use present perfect 'have taken'. Remove duplicate prepositions 'from for from'. 'gives me face of good vibes' is incorrect; use 'gives me good vibes'. The phrase 'taking a picture of nature is wrong' conflicts with context; likely intended 'right' or 'nice'. 'in my in future also' should be 'in the future'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experience, simplify phrasing, and correct 'in the future'.

× I like both but I prefer my UH. I prefer hill station for for going UH and for getting connected with nature beauty so and mountains are especially gives a good vibes and fresh air in compared to sea.

✓ I like both, but I prefer hill stations for going and for getting connected with nature. Mountains especially give good vibes and fresh air compared to the sea.

Errors: incorrect prepositions and articles ('prefer my UH' is filler; 'hill station' should be plural or 'a hill station'; remove duplicated 'for for'). 'connected with nature beauty' needs 'connected with nature' or 'connected with nature's beauty'. 'mountains are especially gives' has subject-verb agreement error — 'mountains give'. 'a good vibes' incorrect article and count — use 'good vibes' (no article). 'in compared to sea' should be 'compared to the sea'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use plural 'hill stations' or 'a hill station', correct verb agreement and prepositions, and add 'the' before 'sea'.