旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but has grammar, word choice and fluency issues. Improve sentence structure and remove fillers. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, correct verb forms (trains are slower), use "allows me" instead of "it enables", and avoid repeating unrelated words ("day trend").

範例: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by train because trains are slower, so I can enjoy the scenery and take photos. For example, last month I photographed rolling hills and fields while we passed through the countryside.

建議: Answer is understandable but has past/present tense errors, awkward phrasing and safety concerns phrased informally. Use correct tense and safer wording (e.g., "lean forward" or "use my phone quickly when safe"), and add a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. That has happened several times when we travel to the countryside because there is often no time to stop. So I usually quickly take photos through the window when it is safe to do so.

建議: Good idea but repeat fillers and grammar mistakes weaken clarity. Use a direct topic sentence, correct singular/plural and articles, and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid filler sounds like "uh" and redundant phrases.

範例: I prefer lakes to mountains because I grew up near a large lake and it feels familiar to me. For example, I enjoy photographing the calm water and reflections at sunset, which I find more peaceful than mountain scenes.

× Yes I do, especially when I travel by train.

✓ Yes, I do, especially when I travel by train.

Punctuation issue: missing comma after 'Yes'. Add a comma for natural spoken-to-written transition. This is not a tense change but improves readability and conforms to standard written English. (English (Mongolia))

× It's umm speed slower and it enables to take some nice photos of natural scenery and because of that I take day trend.

✓ It's umm slower and it allows me to take some nice photos of the natural scenery, and because of that I take day trips.

Multiple problems: 'speed slower' is incorrect word order and choice; use 'slower'. 'enables to take' is incorrect verb pattern: use 'allows me to take'. 'natural scenery' normally takes the definite article 'the'. 'day trend' is wrong word choice; correct is 'day trips'. Fixing these makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural. (English (Mongolia))

× Yes, it had happened several times when we have traveled to countryside and there is no time to stop by and take photos.

✓ Yes, it has happened several times when we have traveled to the countryside and there has been no time to stop by and take photos.

Tense and article issues: 'had happened' suggests past perfect but context uses present perfect 'has happened' to link past events to now. 'to countryside' needs the definite article 'the'. Also 'there is no time' should match present perfect context: 'there has been no time'. (English (Mongolia))

× I usually move down the window and take photo while we are driving.

✓ I usually lower the window and take photos while we are driving.

Incorrect verb choice: 'move down the window' is unnatural; use 'lower the window'. 'take photo' needs plural 'take photos' for general habit. This keeps the progressive clause 'while we are driving' correct. (English (Mongolia))

× Oh, I prefer UH lakes rather than mountain since in my home place we don't have big seas, umm, we only have a big lakes.

✓ Oh, I prefer lakes rather than mountains since in my hometown we don't have big seas; we only have a big lake.

Preposition and noun number errors: 'rather than mountain' should be 'rather than mountains' for parallel nouns. 'in my home place' is unnatural; use 'in my hometown'. 'we only have a big lakes' mixes singular/plural; if there is one, use 'a big lake', otherwise 'big lakes'. Choose consistent number. (English (Mongolia))

× Therefore, comparing to the mountain, I prefer taking photo of UH lakes.

✓ Therefore, compared to the mountains, I prefer taking photos of lakes.

Incorrect comparative structure: use 'compared to' rather than 'comparing to'. 'the mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' to match earlier contrast. 'taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos'. This produces a natural comparative sentence. (English (Mongolia))