旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the sentence natural and grammatically correct, be concise, and add a brief reason or detail. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the seaside and the changing views. For example, I like to see boats and people on the shore.

建議: Correct grammar and word choice, make the response more natural and specific. Start with a direct answer, then give a short reason and one concrete example using a linking word.

範例: Sometimes I do take photos of scenery outside the car window, especially if I see something unusual or beautiful. For instance, I once photographed a rare flock of birds sitting on a telegraph pole.

建議: Give a direct preference sentence, fix grammar and odd phrases, and provide specific reasons with linking words. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum and avoid vague or awkward expressions.

範例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy the open sky and the soft sand on the beach. Moreover, the sea is relaxing and I like walking along the shore to listen to the waves.

× Yes, I usually look out through the window to see the seaside out there when the car and the bus traveling.

✓ Yes, I usually look out through the window to see the seaside when I am traveling by car or bus.

Original sentence uses 'the car and the bus traveling' which incorrectly places 'traveling' without an auxiliary and uses definite articles unnecessarily. This is a problem with the present participle form: 'traveling' must be part of a continuous verb phrase ('am traveling') or be turned into a participial clause properly. Also 'the car and the bus' is awkward; use 'by car or bus' for means of travel. Suggestion: use 'when I am traveling by car or bus' to form a correct continuous clause.

× Sometime I do take a photo of the interesting or the unseen that I never seen before.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of interesting or new things that I have never seen before.

Problems: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb of frequency); 'do take' is unnecessary emphasis in simple present and sounds unnatural here; 'the interesting or the unseen' is ungrammatical - use 'interesting or new things'; 'that I never seen before' uses incorrect verb form and tense: 'seen' requires a perfect auxiliary, so use present perfect 'have never seen'. This fixes adverb, noun choice, and verb tense.

× Well, both of them are look nice and interested, but I prefer the sea because we can see this clear sky of the wheel and we can see the soft sand which is very comfortable.

✓ Well, both of them look nice and interesting, but I prefer the sea because we can see a clear sky above and soft sand that feels very comfortable.

Errors: 'are look' mixes auxiliary 'are' with base verb 'look'—either 'are' with adjective or just 'look'; correct is 'look nice and interesting' (verb 'look' + adjectives). 'Interested' is wrong because it describes feelings, use 'interesting' to describe scenery. 'This clear sky of the wheel' is unclear and incorrect preposition/phrase use; likely intended 'a clear sky above' or 'clear blue sky'. 'Which is very comfortable' refers wrongly to 'sand' with adjective 'comfortable'—better 'that feels very comfortable' or 'soft sand, which is very pleasant'. Suggest using 'a clear sky above and soft sand that feels very comfortable.'