旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid contradictory statements (e.g. saying you don't like long travel but then saying you watch scenery), correct grammar (e.g. 'feel dizzy and unwell'), and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use a linking phrase to add one specific supporting detail (when or what scenery you enjoy).

範例: I usually do look out the window when travelling by car or bus, but only on short trips because I get dizzy on long journeys. For example, I enjoy watching green fields and mountains on clear mornings because the view helps me relax and feel less anxious.

建議: Good direct answer and relevant details. Improve by tightening language and avoiding repetition (e.g. 'especially' twice). Add one specific example and a linking word to make it more natural. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of mountains and green fields, especially at sunrise or sunset. If possible, I stop the car briefly to capture the light and scenery so I can keep those memories.

建議: Answer is relevant but needs clearer grammar and vocabulary. Start with a concise topic sentence ('I prefer the sea') then give 1–2 specific reasons using correct words (e.g. 'marine life' not 'Marines'), and use linking words (because, so) correctly. Keep sentences short and natural.

範例: I prefer the sea because you can do activities like snorkeling and diving and see interesting marine life. Because of those activities, I find the seaside both relaxing and exciting.

× No, I actually don't like traveling for long hours by car or bus because I feel dizzy and poor.

✓ No, I actually don't like traveling for long hours by car or bus because I feel dizzy and unwell.

The adjective 'poor' is incorrectly used to describe a physical feeling; 'unwell' or 'sick' correctly describes feeling ill. Replace 'poor' with 'unwell' to convey the intended meaning. Also ensure consistency in adjective use when describing physical condition.

× So sometimes I love to watch sceneries, especially greenfields and mountains during traveling.

✓ So sometimes I like to watch the scenery, especially green fields and mountains, while traveling.

'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use uncountable 'scenery'. 'Greenfields' should be two words 'green fields'. 'During traveling' is awkward; use 'while traveling'. Also 'love' is strong and 'like' fits better with 'sometimes'. Adjust word order and articles for natural phrasing.

× That's me that's makes me relax and.

✓ That relaxes me.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains redundancy and incorrect verb form ('that's makes'). Simplify to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'That relaxes me.' Remove the trailing conjunction.

× Yes, I love to take photos, especially for mountains and green fields.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos, especially of mountains and green fields.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'photos' to indicate the subject of the photograph. 'For' is incorrect in this context.

× Sometimes I stop the car to take some beautiful photos so I can make memories, especially for example at sunrise or sunset.

✓ Sometimes I stop the car to take beautiful photos to create memories, especially at sunrise or sunset.

Remove redundant phrases 'some' and 'for example' which are unnecessary. 'Make memories' is better expressed as 'create memories'. Keep concise wording and correct preposition use ('at sunrise or sunset').

× I'm more into sea because that we can do many activities like snorkeling or diving and to watch Marines, so that makes me relax and excited to exploring new activities.

✓ I prefer the sea because we can do many activities like snorkeling or diving and watch marine life, which relaxes me and excites me to explore new activities.

Use definite article 'the sea' rather than 'sea'. 'That we can' is incorrect; use 'we can'. 'To watch Marines' is wrong: 'marine life' is the correct term and omit unnecessary 'to' before 'watch'. Fix verb forms and parallel structure: 'relaxes me and excites me to explore' instead of 'makes me relax and excited to exploring'. Use infinitive 'to explore' not gerund after 'excited to'.