旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện thì và ngữ pháp: sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen (I often look), sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng và không lặp ý. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về những gì bạn thấy và cảm nhận để câu có nội dung phong phú hơn. Sử dụng từ nối ngắn gọn (because, so) và tránh lặp từ.

範例: I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy seeing different landscapes, such as mountains and small villages. For example, watching farmers working in the fields relaxes me and makes the journey more enjoyable.

建議: Sửa từ vựng và ý chính: câu chứa nhiều từ sai (taste photos, beautiful girls, mountain artists). Nên trả lời trực tiếp: có hay không, khi nào và lý do. Dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, từ vựng chính xác (take photos, scenery, stop to take pictures, keep memories). Hạn chế thông tin không liên quan.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window. If I see a beautiful view, I usually ask my family to stop so I can take clearer pictures, because I like keeping photos as memories of our trips.

建議: Trình bày ý chính rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer the mountains/the sea) và giải thích cụ thể. Sửa từ sai và ngữ pháp (refer like a milestone, erased). Dùng mô tả cụ thể về khí hậu, hoạt động bạn thích, và từ nối để mạch lạc.

範例: I prefer the mountains because the air is fresh and the atmosphere feels calm. I enjoy hiking and the cooler weather in the mountains, which helps me relax more than being at the busy seaside.

× I often looked out the window while I was traveling because I enjoy seeing different landscape like mountain or situations because it helps me relax and more enjoyable.

✓ I often look out the window while I am travelling because I enjoy seeing different landscapes like mountains or other scenes; it helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

The student mixed past and present tenses: 'I often looked' with 'I enjoy'. Use present simple 'I often look' for habitual actions. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' and 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains'. 'Situations' is unnatural for scenery; use 'other scenes'. The clause 'it helps me relax and more enjoyable' is ungrammatical; use parallel verb forms: 'helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habits (present simple), use plural nouns for general categories, and maintain parallel structure in coordinated verbs.

× I like to taste photos when I see beautiful girls, especially mountain artists say.

✓ I like to take photos when I see beautiful views, especially of mountains.

The verb 'taste' is incorrect; use 'take' for photos. The phrase 'beautiful girls' is likely unintended; 'beautiful views' fits the context of scenery. 'Mountain artists say' is unclear and ungrammatical; probably intended 'especially of mountains'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('take photos', 'beautiful views') and remove unclear phrases.

× I always stop at the destination to take more features when I am traveling with my family because I want to keep the memories.

✓ I always stop at different places to take more photos when I am travelling with my family because I want to keep the memories.

The phrase 'stop at the destination to take more features' is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Destination' implies final place; better 'different places'. 'Take more features' is incorrect; use 'take more photos'. Suggestion: Use logical collocations ('stop at different places', 'take photos') and keep consistent tense (present continuous/simple for habitual actions).

× I refer like a milestone, uh, because when I say the mountain, I think the weather around the mountain erased and comfortable.

✓ I prefer the mountains because when I think of them, I find the weather around mountains fresh and comfortable.

'I refer like a milestone' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'I prefer the mountains' for stating a preference. 'When I say the mountain' should be 'when I think of them' or 'when I think of mountains'. 'Erased' is wrong word choice; likely meant 'fresh' or 'mild'. Use 'comfortable' to describe weather. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear pronouns. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' to express preference, 'think of' for mental reference, choose appropriate adjectives for weather ('fresh', 'cool', 'pleasant').