旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeated words and filler sounds, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, for instance).

範例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel because I enjoy the changing scenery. For instance, when I visited Singapore last year, I noticed the city’s skyline and green spaces, which made the journey very enjoyable.

建議: Be direct and reduce filler words. Give a clear reason and one brief detail about when you can or cannot take photos. Use linking words like however or because to make the explanation coherent.

範例: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car window; however, it is difficult because the vehicle is moving. For example, I usually manage to take pictures only when we stop at a scenic viewpoint or when traffic is slow.

建議: Give a clear direct answer first (state your preference), then support it with a brief specific reason and an example. Avoid unclear phrases and reduce hesitations. Use linking words such as because and since.

範例: I prefer the mountains because I like hiking and quiet nature. For example, I have gone hiking three or four times a year since I was at university, and I enjoy the fresh air and the views.

× Yes, I look at our beautiful scenery when I travel, travel upload.

✓ Yes, I look at the beautiful scenery when I travel.

The speaker used 'our' which is unnecessary and slightly awkward in this context; 'the beautiful scenery' is the natural phrase. Also the repetition 'travel, travel upload' is ungrammatical and likely a speech disfluency; remove it for a grammatical sentence. Use of 'the' identifies specific scenery viewed while traveling.

× For example, when I went to Singapore, uh, the views were very, uh, beautiful and the cities are very huge.

✓ For example, when I went to Singapore, the views were very beautiful and the cities were very large.

The sentence mixes past tense ('went', 'were') with present tense ('are'). Maintain past tense throughout when referring to a past trip. Also 'huge' is acceptable but 'large' is more natural with 'cities'. Remove filler words 'uh' for clarity.

× Yes, I sometimes take a photo outside from car window, but you know, 'cause, uh, moving, so it, it's uh, it's difficult to take photos from inside the car.

✓ Yes, I sometimes take a photo from the car window, but because it's moving, it's difficult to take photos from inside the car.

Preposition and article errors: use 'from the car window' not 'outside from car window'. Replace colloquial 'cause' with 'because' and simplify redundant fillers. Also 'it's moving' is clearer than fragmented phrasing.

× Uh, different delivery for mountains.

✓ I have different preferences for mountains.

The original fragment 'different delivery for mountains' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is 'I have different preferences' or 'I prefer mountains differently' — use 'I have different preferences for mountains' to form a complete, grammatical sentence.

× I I've hiked uh 3 or 4 * a year since I was a university student.

✓ I've hiked three or four times a year since I was a university student.

Use present perfect ('I've hiked') with 'since' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Include 'times' after the number to indicate frequency. Use numerals spelled out in formal speech; remove extra filler 'uh' and the stray '*' symbol.