旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with accuracy and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammatical errors (e.g. 'get outside the window' → 'look out of the window'), and keep sentences concise (max 3–4). Use a linking word to add one specific supporting detail. For example, say why it relaxes you and give one brief example of what you notice.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching passing parks and houses, which takes my mind off work. Also, I sometimes put my phone down to rest my eyes.

建議: Improve grammar, reduce redundancy and add a brief specific detail. Use linking words (e.g. 'especially' or 'so') correctly and keep sentences to a maximum of four. Replace vague phrases like 'interesting place or scenario' with a concrete example.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery, especially when I see a beautiful building or a colourful sunset. I usually look at these photos later to remember the trip, which always makes me feel happy.

建議: Provide a complete, well-structured answer: state your preference, give two specific reasons, and finish the final sentence. Avoid repetition (e.g. 'hiking in the road, in the trees, in the mountains') — choose one clear image. Use linking words (e.g. 'because' and 'so') and correct small mistakes.

範例: I definitely prefer the mountains because they become beautifully green in summer and I enjoy outdoor exercise. For instance, I often go hiking on forest trails, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

× Yes, I often get outside the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax and really helps me pass the time and also it's give me a opportunity to put up my phone and relax my eyes.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax and pass the time, and it also gives me an opportunity to put away my phone and rest my eyes.

Errors: incorrect verb 'get' for looking out (use 'look out of'), wrong preposition 'outside the window' (use 'out of the window'), incorrect contraction and verb agreement 'it's give' (should be 'it gives'), wrong article 'a opportunity' (should be 'an opportunity'), wrong phrasal verb 'put up my phone' (intended 'put away my phone'), and awkward phrase 'relax my eyes' (better 'rest my eyes'). Suggestion: choose correct verbs and prepositions, ensure subject-verb agreement, use 'an' before vowel sounds, and use common collocations such as 'look out of the window', 'put away my phone', 'rest my eyes'.

× Yes, I often take photos out of the scenery especially when I notice a interesting place or scenario and also I will check it later to reminisce this previous moments which makes me happy.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery, especially when I notice an interesting place or scene, and I check them later to reminisce about those moments, which makes me happy.

Errors: wrong preposition 'take photos out of the scenery' (correct is 'take photos of the scenery'), incorrect article 'a interesting' (should be 'an interesting'), awkward noun 'scenario' used instead of 'scene', incorrect pronoun/number 'this previous moments' (should be 'those moments'), unnecessary future tense 'I will check' (simple present 'I check' fits habitual action), and missing preposition 'reminisce about'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and articles, match plural/singular forms, and use appropriate verbs for habitual actions.

× I definitely prefer the mountains because they turn beautifully green in summer and I like sports too, especially hiking. I like hiking in the road, in the trees, in the mountains, which can help me relax and.

✓ I definitely prefer the mountains because they turn beautifully green in summer, and I like sports too, especially hiking. I like hiking on trails through the woods and mountains because it helps me relax.

Errors: awkward phrase 'hiking in the road, in the trees, in the mountains' (use 'hiking on roads/trails, in the woods, and in the mountains' or more natural 'on trails through the woods and mountains'), incorrect preposition 'in the road' (should be 'on the road' or 'on roads/trails'), sentence fragment ending with 'and.' that leaves the clause incomplete, and verb agreement/tense choice 'can help me relax and.' (incomplete). Suggestion: restructure for parallelism and clarity, use correct prepositions ('on' for roads/trails, 'in' for woods), complete the final clause and use consistent tense 'helps me relax'.