旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms (e.g., past or present continuous) and connectors to make the answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by train or car. For example, when I visited my grandfather in Busan at eight, I took the KTX and watched the green mountains pass by. The changing scenery always makes the journey more enjoyable.

建議: Answer the question directly, then give specific details in a few coherent sentences. Correct unclear phrases and use logical connectors (for example, 'so', 'because', 'for example'). Avoid short fragmented statements and incorrect verb usage.

範例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from a car or plane. For example, when I visited Hawaii at 20, I stopped the car at a viewpoint and took many pictures of the sea because the light and color were beautiful. Those photos remind me of that memorable trip.

建議: Begin with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and one supporting detail. Use correct articles and noun forms (e.g., 'many chances', 'looking at the sea' -> 'to see the sea'). Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' correctly and limit to 2–3 sentences total.

範例: I prefer the sea because I live in Seoul and rarely have the chance to see it. When I go to the coast I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach, which makes those trips very special.

× When I was eight I visited my grandfather house in Busan.

✓ When I was eight, I visited my grandfather's house in Busan.

Missing possessive apostrophe and punctuation: 'grandfather house' should be 'grandfather's house' to show possession. Also add a comma after the introductory time phrase 'When I was eight'. Suggestion: use possessive 'grandfather's' and include comma after introductory clause.

× I used to take a train called KTX.

✓ I used to take a train called KTX.

No correction needed for verb form: 'used to' correctly expresses a habitual past action. This sentence is grammatically correct, so keep as is.

× At first I look at the window is it was really green scenery like mountains and.

✓ At first I looked out of the window; it was really green scenery, with mountains and trees.

Multiple errors: tense and verb form — 'I look' should be past 'I looked' to match past narrative (Past tense issue). Preposition and structure — use 'looked out of the window' rather than 'look at the window'. Sentence fragments and punctuation — 'is it was' is incorrect; separate into two clauses and use a semicolon or period. 'Like mountains and' is incomplete; add a noun such as 'trees' or finish the list. Suggestion: use past tense consistently, correct preposition 'out of', and complete the list of scenery items.

× Absolutely, yes. When I was 20, I visited Hawaii.

✓ Absolutely, yes. When I was 20, I visited Hawaii.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written; no article error. 'Hawaii' is a proper noun and needs no article. Keep the original.

× I landed my car.

✓ I rented a car.

The verb 'landed' is incorrect with 'car' (Sentence structure error). 'Land' is used for planes or to arrive by flying. Context suggests the speaker meant they rented or hired a car. Suggestion: use 'rented a car' or 'hired a car' to convey the intended meaning.

× Look at that back in the days.

✓ Look at that back in the day.

Incorrect phrase 'back in the days' should be 'back in the day' for a colloquial reference to past times (Sentence structure error). Also, as a past narrative, consider 'I remember back in the day' or 'Back in those days' if plural is intended.

× It's really a good scenery, like sea.

✓ It was really beautiful scenery, like the sea.

Word choice and article use: 'scenery' is uncountable and not normally preceded by 'a'. Use 'beautiful scenery' and past tense 'it was' to match narrative. Add definite article 'the' before 'sea' when referring to the sea in that context. Suggestion: use adjectives like 'beautiful' and correct article usage.

× It was so memorable for me.

✓ It was very memorable for me.

Grammatically this sentence is acceptable; changing 'so' to 'very' is stylistic. The past tense 'was' correctly matches the narrative. No obligatory change required, but 'very memorable' is a clearer register.

× I prefer to see this because I live in Seoul, so I don't have a many chance to looking the sea.

✓ I prefer to see the sea because I live in Seoul, so I don't have many chances to see it.

Multiple errors: 'prefer to see this' is vague — specify 'the sea'. 'a many chance' is incorrect quantifier and article use — should be 'many chances' (Incorrect use of quantifiers and Article errors). 'to looking the sea' is wrong verb form and preposition — use infinitive 'to see' and object pronoun 'it' or 'the sea' (Verb + -ing form and Incorrect use of pronouns). Also maintain present simple 'I live' and 'I don't have' which are correct. Suggestion: use 'many chances' or 'many opportunities' and the infinitive 'to see'.

× So I like sea and I really like swimming in the sea.

✓ So I like the sea and I really like swimming in it.

Article and pronoun use: 'like sea' should be 'like the sea' (Article errors). Repeating 'the sea' is acceptable, but using pronoun 'it' avoids repetition. Suggestion: use 'the sea' as a general noun and 'it' as the pronoun when referring back.