旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your response clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, but, because) and avoid repetitions. Also correct tense and article errors (e.g., "when I'm in the car", "I usually get motion sickness"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by car, but I rarely do so on buses because I get motion sickness. For example, on long car journeys I enjoy watching mountains and sunlight through the trees, but on a bus I prefer to close my eyes or read to avoid feeling ill.

建議: Answer directly and organise your supporting detail with clearer grammar and linking words. Use specific examples and avoid repetition. Fix verb forms (e.g., "I enjoy taking photos"), and keep sentences concise. Mention one clear example of when you took photos and why.

範例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially of sunsets or sea views because they make me feel calm. For example, when I was a teenager I filled my phone with sunset pictures during family trips to the coast.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Correct grammar (e.g., "I feel really relaxed", "I would definitely take a picture"). Avoid repeating the same word and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I definitely prefer the sea because being by the water makes me feel relaxed and peaceful. For example, I enjoy watching sunsets over the ocean and taking photos to remember those moments, and I often spend time at the beach with friends and family to unwind.

× I sometimes look through the window when I'm driving in car, but on buses I almost all the times got motion sickness so I don't like to be the scenery if I'm in my car.

✓ I sometimes look through the window when I'm driving a car, but on buses I almost always get motion sickness so I don't like to see the scenery when I'm in a bus.

Errors: 'in car' should be 'a car' (article issue - fits article errors/phrase; treated here as present participle context because 'driving' is present participle but phrase needed article); 'almost all the times' is incorrect collocation, use 'almost always'; 'got' is past tense but context is habitual present, use 'get'; 'don't like to be the scenery' is incorrect verb choice and meaning, use 'don't like to see the scenery' and keep consistent reference to 'bus' not 'car'. Suggestion: use correct articles with vehicles, use 'almost always' for frequency, use present simple for habitual actions and 'see' for perceiving scenery.

× I would love to see if the scenery is about mountains are and a sunlight.

✓ I would love to see if the scenery includes mountains and sunlight.

Errors: 'is about mountains are and a sunlight' is ungrammatical. Use 'includes' or 'has' to describe elements of scenery; 'sunlight' does not need an article here. Suggestion: simplify to 'includes mountains and sunlight' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes I do, especially if the scenery hits a sunset or a sea view I really enjoy to take photos of scenery to where I feel relaxed.

✓ Yes I do, especially if the scenery includes a sunset or a sea view; I really enjoy taking photos of scenery where I feel relaxed.

Errors: 'hits a sunset' is incorrect collocation; use 'includes a sunset' or 'has a sunset'; 'I really enjoy to take photos' is incorrect verb pattern — after 'enjoy' use gerund 'taking' not infinitive; 'to where I feel relaxed' is awkward, use 'where I feel relaxed'. Suggestion: use correct collocations for scenery and the gerund after 'enjoy'.

× For example, when I was a teenager a teenager my cell phone was ruled with a a lot of pictures about sunsets and.

✓ For example, when I was a teenager my cell phone was full of a lot of pictures of sunsets.

Errors: repeated phrase 'a teenager a teenager'; 'was ruled with' is incorrect verb choice — use 'was full of' or 'had'; 'a a lot of' has duplicate article; 'pictures about sunsets' should be 'pictures of sunsets'. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'was full of' and 'pictures of'.

× I definitely prefer the Seaview. I feel and really relax when I'm at the sea.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea view. I feel really relaxed when I'm at the sea.

Errors: 'Seaview' should be two words 'sea view' or 'the sea'; 'I feel and really relax' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'I feel really relaxed'; 'relaxed' is adjective describing state. Suggestion: use 'feel relaxed' and correct spacing/word choice.

× So if I had the opportunity to view us a sunset, for example, at the sea, I would definitely would take a picture of that.

✓ So if I had the opportunity to view a sunset at the sea, I would definitely take a picture of it.

Errors: 'view us a sunset' is incorrect pronoun and word order — use 'view a sunset'; double modal 'would definitely would take' repeats 'would' unnecessarily; use 'take a picture of it' rather than 'that' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure and avoid repeating modals.

× And also I I think the Seaview are memories that are really important. Relaxing and to enjoy life with friends and family.

✓ I also think the sea view creates memories that are really important: relaxing and enjoying life with friends and family.

Errors: repeated 'I I'; 'Seaview are memories' subject-verb and noun usage wrong — 'sea view' can 'create memories' or 'the sea' 'brings memories'; 'Relaxing and to enjoy life' mixes -ing and infinitive forms; keep parallel structure 'relaxing and enjoying'. Suggestion: remove repetition, correct subject-verb agreement and use parallel gerunds for the list.