旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say why looking out improves your mood and give a brief example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because it lifts my mood. For example, I enjoy watching trees and towns pass by, which helps me relax before a busy day.

建議: Correct verb tenses, simplify phrasing, and use linking words to make it coherent. Give one specific example of what you photograph and why, and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I often take photos and short videos when the weather is nice. For instance, I will photograph a colorful sunset from the car window to save the memory and watch it later.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid fillers and repetition, and provide a specific reason with a linking word. Mention one concrete sensory detail (sound, view) to support your answer and keep it concise.

範例: I prefer the sea because, after living near mountains, the ocean offers a different atmosphere. For example, the sound of waves and the wide horizon help me relax and break my daily routine.

× Yes, I prefer look outside during my travel travel as it's cherish my mood and feel a sense of regenerate myself.

✓ Yes, I prefer looking outside during my travels as it cheers my mood and makes me feel reenergized.

Multiple issues: after 'prefer' when comparing general habits use gerund form ('looking') not base verb; 'travel travel' is repetitive so use plural 'travels' for general trips (singular/plural); 'it's cherish my mood' is incorrect verb form — use 'it cheers my mood' (present simple third person); 'feel a sense of regenerate myself' is wrong structure and word choice — use 'makes me feel reenergized' or 'helps me feel refreshed'. Suggestions: use gerunds after prefer for habitual action, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct adjective or past participle like 'reenergized'.

× Yes I do, when I saw nice weather outside, I prefer took picture to scenery and also make a video to save that memories for my upcoming days to enjoy to make a great memory.

✓ Yes, I do. When I see nice weather outside, I prefer to take pictures of the scenery and also make a video to save those memories to enjoy later.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'when I saw' mixes past with present habit — use present 'when I see' for habitual action; after 'prefer' to talk about a choice use 'prefer to take' or 'prefer taking' — not 'prefer took'; 'took' is past tense and incorrect here; 'picture to scenery' should be 'pictures of the scenery' (preposition 'of'); 'save that memories' uses wrong demonstrative and plural agreement — use 'those memories'; 'for my upcoming days to enjoy to make a great memory' is awkward and redundant — 'to enjoy later' is concise. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for habitual actions, use correct infinitive/gerund after 'prefer', and fix prepositions and determiners.

× I prefer sea as I live in Dawson Creek which is covered with the all mountains so sea is helping to break my daily monotony and the umm, the hearing, the hearings, uh, the waters babes, it's give me a sense of relaxation.

✓ I prefer the sea because I live in Dawson Creek, which is surrounded by mountains, so the sea helps break my daily monotony and the sound of the waves gives me a sense of relaxation.

Several structure and grammar problems: 'I prefer sea' needs the definite article 'the sea'; 'covered with the all mountains' is ungrammatical — use 'surrounded by mountains' or 'covered by mountains' and drop 'the all'; 'sea is helping' is awkward for habitual preference — use 'the sea helps' (present simple); filler words 'the umm...' should be omitted; 'the hearings, uh, the waters babes' is incorrect vocabulary — likely intended 'the sound of the waves'; 'it's give me' has wrong agreement — use 'gives me'. Suggestions: use articles correctly, choose appropriate collocations ('surrounded by', 'sound of the waves'), use present simple for habitual facts, and remove fillers.