旅行— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki kelancaran dan struktur jawaban: hilangkan pengulangan kata-kata seperti "uh" dan pengulangan frasa. Mulai dengan kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu tambahkan 1–2 kalimat dukungan yang spesifik (mis. jenis pemandangan atau contoh tempat). Gunakan kata hubung sederhana untuk keterkaitan (mis. "because", "for example"). Latih pengucapan nama tempat dan tata bahasa dasar (mis. past tense atau present simple) agar lebih natural.

範例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy seeing the local scenery. For example, in Jakarta and Kadiri I like watching parks and old buildings pass by, which shows me different sides of the city.

建議: Perjelas alasan dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat: ganti frasa tidak jelas seperti "a lot of less so dirty" dengan penjelasan yang jelas (mis. "because the view is often dirty or has a lot of rubbish"). Susun jawaban menjadi satu kalimat topik dan satu kalimat penjelas; hindari pengulangan dan filler. Latih vocab terkait kebersihan dan foto (mis. "litter", "dirty", "take photos").

範例: No, I rarely take photos from car windows because the view is often cluttered and there is a lot of litter near the road, so the pictures do not look nice.

建議: Jawab langsung dengan preferensi lalu berikan alasan spesifik. Hindari kalimat yang membingungkan dan perbaiki kosakata lokasi (mis. "hampton" tampak salah; klarifikasi maksud). Gunakan linking words seperti "but" atau "because" untuk menghubungkan alasan. Berikan contoh pengalaman konkret (mis. perjalanan terakhir ke pantai atau gunung).

範例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the fresh air, but I sometimes visit the sea with friends. For example, on a recent trip to the coast the beach was quite dirty, so I enjoyed the mountain trails more.

× Yes, I do because, uh, I, I have, uh, see a lot of place in Jakarta, in Kadiri maybe because, uh, I look at uh, in the window and I see a lot of beautiful place. That's good. Uh, and I like this.

✓ Yes, I do because I have seen a lot of places in Jakarta, maybe in Kediri, because I look out of the window and I see many beautiful places. That's nice, and I like them.

The speaker used incorrect verb forms and noun forms: 'have see' should be present perfect 'have seen' to indicate experience up to now, and 'place' should be plural 'places' when referring to many. 'Look at in the window' is awkward; use 'look out of the window'. 'A lot of' with a countable noun requires plural. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences, plural nouns for multiple items, and common collocations like 'look out of the window'.

× Uh no, I never take a picture in uh win cars window because a lot of less so dirty and lot of rubbish in uh in beside in beside my car.

✓ No, I never take a picture through the car window because it is very dirty and there is a lot of rubbish beside the car.

Prepositions and articles are used incorrectly: 'in win cars window' should be 'through the car window' or 'from the car window'. 'In beside' is redundant; use 'beside the car'. Also missing 'it is' and 'there is' to form correct clauses. Suggestion: use 'through' or 'from' for taking photos through windows, and use 'beside' or 'next to' correctly with 'the'.

× Uh, I don't have idea because, umm, sometimes my friend invite me to invite me, uh, go to the hills and look at the sea In my Hampton maybe, but I don't like this because, uh, in my Hampton so dirty.

✓ I don't have an idea because sometimes my friend invites me to go to the hills or to see the sea near my hometown, but I don't like it because my hometown is very dirty.

Subject-verb agreement and tense problems: 'my friend invite' should be 'my friend invites' (third-person singular). Redundant 'to invite me, invite me' should be one 'invites me'. 'Go to the hills and look at the sea In my Hampton' is unclear; use 'go to the hills or to see the sea near my hometown'. 'So dirty' needs a verb: 'is very dirty'. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the subject, avoid repetition, and include a linking verb for adjectives describing states.